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phew! hottt!!! i love the way you've captured the dom impulse of both of them... and (heheh) i like that yami comes out on top! it's also nice that although the sex is sort of forced, it's not non-con/rape. you may not care, but in one place you write "waste" instead of "waist," and in a couple of paras you repeat the same word a number of times (the only one i can think of now is "slamming" and "slam")... but shmeegley-shmee, all i have to say is good work, and please keep lines like "They broke the kiss reluctantly- it wouldn't do to die of asphyxiation now" coming our way!!!

Holy Fuck! UKE SETO! I loved it! Write another. Now.