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for The XX Factor *completed*

by Wicabeth

person mofaf1
schedule March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I can hardly wait for the birth....Jou is gonna wanna rip off more than just Kaiba's head when he/she's in the delivery room trying to push that miniature elephant through that little cocktail straw (at least that is what it felt like when I had each of my kids). If his/her delivery is anything like mine he's gonna feel like he's being drawn and quartered from the inside out and the only one there is to blame will be Seto Kaiba...

On the positive side...the pain is so great that Jou won't be able to do much more than blast Seto with his/her voice since the hands will be in a death grip on the bed and the feet will be trussed up in the stirrups with everything else open to public view of the doctors, nurses and daddy to be....

Of course afterwards Jou will be overwhelmed with the emotions from seeing the new little bundle... (and it'll hurt too much to stand much less walk or run) so Seto will be forgiven and encouraged (by Jou) to pamper the pup and baby as much as possible...

have fun.
person Silvershadowfire
schedule March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
At least when Joey's a boy, then he won't have to worry about it ever again. Of course, in a lot of ways this is the _easy_ part... Eh, keep going please!
person maggiemay
schedule March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
And it gets better and better. LOL...keep up the great work...and hurry would ya...I want seto to deliver the baby or cut the cord or something. >.<
person Nomalaz
schedule March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Uh-oh! It's countdown to the most painful day of Joey's life! I liked the name for their little girl.
I do have one personal request, if possible: Please have both Marik and Bakura forced to watch the birth as punishment for what they did to Joey. And if you have them faint, I will love you forever. Fainting yamis are hilarious.
person jemu
schedule March 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YAY !! you updated !! Yes! the baby shower commences.. and ooo, Marik and Bakura getting a little fresh there aren't they? HAHAHAHA, I like how Joey tends to get violent when he turns mushy.. keep updating !
person Silvershadowfire
schedule March 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cute chapter. Gotta love baby showers.

One little thing, though...you have an inconsistancy. In the first game, Mokuba was out in the first round - then suddenly he and Serenity were the finalists. Just thought you should know.

person DAISEY
schedule March 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another cute chapter. Nicely done!
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
CUTE!
This is KAWAII!
(And yes, I am looking at this both on mediaminer and adultfanfiction...)
person daisey
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
**grins** I loved this chapter... especially the last couple of lines. So perfectly Joey. Can't wait for more.
person kupo
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay its a girl. I knew it was gonna be a girl!!!!