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The chapter was great, hun. Reall, you did a wonderful job, and I'm so glad you're including everyone in the story. It adds a nice new flavor to it.

Drac and The Assembly

There are too many people in this fic. YOu want to include the emotions of everyone, but you're leaving out the emotions of the three hikaris and focusing on everyone else for nearly the whole first and second chapters.

It runs together and its hard for me to see where it's going, when time changes, when scenes change.

I like the idea of this fic, I'm just trying to give some constructive criticisms as I realize my fictions need work as well..

There are just too many people with out a real focus and when attention is focused on the three subjects, Yugi, Ryou, and Marik, it goes right back to the group and you lose a sense of story...I dunno, I got lost...I had to re-read all three chapters...

I'll be back though.

Oh, wow! This was just such a sweet and fluffy chapter! I loved it! It's probably one of the best stories I seen with the way Tristan/Devlin is handled. And the writing, as usual, is excellent!

I love this story...stayed up so i could read it all. I think that everything, all of the events your putting out, are so close to what would actually happen, it's a wonder this wasn't thought of in the show. keep writing them and I will be glad to read them.

I really am a fan of your work! This story really tugs at my heartstrings. I like how the gang has come together to help the hikaris, even those who weren't necessarily close to them before. I also like how the hikaris' loss is a catalyst for the other characters to look at their feelings. You are doing a great job with showing the feelings of everyone involved. I look forward to reading more!

I just adore this story...so sweet! Write more soon please!

Allo, thank you for another great story, after reading Invisible Me I came over and read all eight chapters of this story. I really should be off to bed, so I'm saving your third story for tomorrow, but please please update any and preferably all of your stories soon. I should have known a compatriot of Drac's would be worth reading! Please remember to add me to your update list, my email's on my review of IM. Ja ne!

*nods* This should be interesting... I wonder what tests the hikaris will have to go through. Please add me to your mailing list? Thanks!

Update. NOW. I will not repeat myself. I hate cliffies, I hate them I hate them I hate them, so give me another chapter of this wonderfully done story and I might forgive you for it. Go. get writing, and please email me when you update.

Yes Yami go back to Yugi! You know you want to! ^.~