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for Broken Darkness

by Crystal56

person Silveriss
schedule February 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like the start to this story. I'm glad you're taking the "reaquaintence" slowly. Rushing through any story just makes the story feel rushed. You also seem to be very good at editing. I've noticed very few gramatical errors. Keep up the good work. I hope to read more soon. This promises to be a fun story. Thank you.
person ITALIANA
schedule February 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great! yamiXyugi is my favourite couple! My english is so so, sorry! continue it, please!
person maggiemay
schedule February 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Waahhhhh! I want MORE!
schedule February 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OOOHH YEAHHH!!! my fav couple is Yami and Yuugi, and the Yami i'm imagining right now is exactly the way i like him (drools) :D'''''''''''''''', please please don't make Teah a bitch (the "wants-to-steal-yami-from-yugi-and-strangely-hates-her-childhood-friend" type), i like to think that she has a crush on Yuugi instead of Yami and fight with Yami for him (now that would be interesting, huh)
Your story really caught my attention please don't ever leave it unfinished!!! T_T and make a happy ending or i'm gonna cry T_____T
person MAGGIEMAY
schedule February 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great beginning! Please continue soon.