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I`m glad the info helped, if you need more I might be able to help. I`m obsessed with Yu-gi-Oh right now. So I have a tendancy to know too much. (just like with Dragonball and Petshop of Horrors, which I recently became enthralled in. I can`t get enough of them.) Oh well. Loved this chpater. I hope they get together. I love that pair.

awww. darn jou's friends!! agrh. i thought Mai would tell them and stop them. lol and it was getting to the good part too. XD haha. and yes please do continue i wonder if they'll patch this up . XD hahaha okay enough of my stupidness. XD

wow ....that just change everything. I means, I feel bad for Seto now, poor baby. You just want to kidnap Jou and give it to him tied down and naked. But that Jou know it's him and just kissed him back, ..... you still want to tied him up and naked for Seto *giggle*

I can't wait to see you update more and I hope to see another of your story really soon.

Now, I don't usually review stories. Mostly because I'm disgusted that the quality of writing on this site has drastically declined. But something in this story, when Joey knew Seto by scent, made my heart skip a beat. Now I find myself checking for chapters, which is something I only do with one other story by a very expirenced author. So, I come here, not to pump up your writing ability, because it's alright, but it will get better as you write more. I come here to commend your creative ability, because that's what requires talent. Anybody can learn to write, you have to be born creative. I can't even say what exactly it is about this piece that catches me so. Perhaps it the lack of really bad sex. Everything at this site that starts out remotely romantic is destroyed with really bad sex. So I also come here to beg. Please, please, do not destroy this story with bad sex, past lives, cleches, shadow powers, or other such nonesense. I am guessing by the title that Seto will be in an accident on the way home. And I find myself looking foreward to hospital bedside scenes. And lastly, I come here to offer something I've never offered before. I would very much enjoy becoming a beta to this fic. So please consider my offer. You can contact me at the e-mail above. And keep writing, always. ~Ykarzel

Jams: Kura if you bite her I'm kicking your ass!
Bakura Action Doll: And why would I wanna bite her?
Evil Malik Doom Dollie: Bite her for the lack of pure smut!! XD
Bakura Action Doll: XD
Seto Plushie: Oh good grief...
Neko Jounouchi: ::gives Seto a feral grin::
Seto Plushie: O.OU
Evil Malik Doom Dollie: Alright!!! Smut!! XD
Bakura Action Doll: XD
Jams: ::sighs and shakes her head:: -.-U

Nice to read, well done!
I hope it lives up to its rating!

The chapters are a bit short though, 1 and 2 could easily have been one chapter.

But that's my only point to criticize. ^^x
And now let the lemony goodness be coming! XD

wow...like it lots, am putting it on my faves. Won't ask you to update soon...nope...ain't gonna...ask, gonna beg...pretty please.

wah! Oh no!! Poor Kaiba!! save him! save him!! Stop Tristan! Stop everybody!! Wah!!!

I found it interesting how, despite Jou figuring out who it was, he eyes didn't snap open or anything shocking like that. It was more like an acknowledgement.

Damn, oh well. Seto/Jou are hot too.

I love this story. I always love Jou/Seto stories.

Bakura is usually used for the spirit in the ring. However some call him Touzakou or something like that. Malik is the hikari and Marik is the yami. The reason for this is because the original name in the manga in Japan is Malik. So people use that. I have used Yami Marik and Yarik in some of my discussions because I have seen it used. Yarik is like yami and marik put together. I don`t know who first used it but it does work well. However everyone uses their own writing style so you can use whatever just let us know so that we don`t get confused. However most use the Bakura dark/Ryou light and Marik dark/Malik light thing.

Keep up the good work and don`t let anything stop you. If you can`t find another Beta I`d be glad to do so. However you have done very well so far. I don`t use betas. I don`t like to have people see my work before it is posted, that`s just me though and I do have several different spell checkers and grammer checkers that I run threw before posting plus I reread what I write.