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Well, I honestly didn't expect it to be Kaiba and Jou...but I'll lay money that the video they were watching is the proof of the deed. It would be like Kaiba to videotape himself and Jou beating Atemu up. And I'll lay money that Anzu asked them to do it too. I wonder what will happen when Atem gets back to Japan that he and Yugi can get around to planning revenge?

ohhh wow...what a turn.... i can't wait till the next chapter...and lemon!!!!!!!!!

Well, that I didn't expect. I figured Anzu must have seen them kissing, but I didn't expect that. Yugi IS bi, right?
That was slightly nasty of Atemu...but at least now Yugi can be honest with everyone. Not that I think it's going to help in the near future...

did she walk in on them.. dun dun dunnnnn????

*sigh* Nice one, although... do you mean that Yugi is *really* in love with Anzu? *shudders* Sorry. ^^;; I'm too much of an extreme yaoi fangirl, I can't accept het pairings, not at all. Except for that it's all right. ^^x

Ciao!
~Horizont

You should be commended. This is one of the few fics I've read were Jou is intuitive, intelligent and even wise. He's still Jou, but you've emphized the qualities in the character that most people downplay or ignore. Well done!
In a funny way, you've done the same with Yugi- I always knew there was a cynical, hentai mind behind those big eyes. :)

Hi there!

Wow, I can't help it, I love how Yugi is so helpless about his feelings for Atemu! ^_^x

A THIRD language? *lol* Which for god's sake, I can't think of a character of YGO that... hey wait! There's that guy from Germany... his name is written in some funny way I can't remember. :P Wagner's "Ritt der Valkyren" is his bg music whenever he plays a card... or sth like that.

Okay, gotta go to bed now... tomorrow will be a qualify tournament for the german championships so I have to get up quite early. ^^x

Thanks for updating!
~Horizont

Oooh, interesting, very interesting, never seen a Atemu/Yugi relationship like this. It's great, please update it again soon! ^.^ And hopefully There'll be more lemony goodness, is Atemu ever gonna fuck Yugi?

Since I've been reading all six chapters in a row I guess it's time for a review. I didn't read it for nothing after all.

I love stories with ukes, that desire their semes physically but deny that and try to get away from them - w/o success.
That is sth you write beautifully!

But. And there's a big but, so beware! ^_^x

Please decide which language you're going to use. It's nice to see that you know Japanese and even the original card names, but it's horrible to read a text that consists of two languages and is filled with translations. Your story would be so much better if you'd stick to English!
One more thing: You got all the time you need and want to tell your story, don't get hasty! It seems to me that sometimes you try to get to some point extremely fast and the plot suffers from that.

Well, last thing is personal, I can't stand Anzu and Yugi/Anzu is like one of the worst pairings I can think of... but again, that's just my personal liking. Get her out of the picture and I'd be sooo happy!

To sum it up: I wouldn'd have read it all if it wasn't worth my time. But as an author I think that you can still improve yourself!

Keep up the good work!
~Horizont

PS: Hope you don't feel offended or so. This isn't supposed to be a flame! ^_^x

Atemu is a horn dog! YEESH! Does he want a threesome with Yuugi and Anzu??

You have to write a separate story with Ryo and Akeifa (I think that is how it spelled...is that really Bakura's name?? Yuck!). You can have Ryo smacking him upside the head everytime he says something vile...;)