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for Wife of the Pharoah

by YamisGirl

person sexykitten
schedule November 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ohhhhhh very very good i like it plz do some more and let me know ok thanks for this its really good.
person Kurama\'sFoxyMiko
schedule August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update!!! Update!!! I haven't been able to find any good Yu-Gi-Oh/Inuyasha fics on AFF.Net so far and this is much better than the ones I've read so far. I hope you update soon.
person alyssa
schedule March 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ye is a ye lode good writer
person Anon
schedule December 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Im sorry, but this is awful....
I know it isnt a mary sue....but god, does it sound like one....
person rivgirl
schedule December 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
nice job can't wait to see what is next
person Anon
schedule December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Delete this now, jesus christ, it's horrible!
person Tina
schedule December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wtf is this
person 55378008
schedule December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Um...*blinks* I can't really see Yami with Kagome, sorry. Plus, I hate Kagome. I think she's a total slut with her mini-skirt that never shows her ass when she bends over. And, she's not pretty. Some Inuyasha people are pretty (like Sango and Kikyou), but Kagome doesn't fall in that category. Even Shizuka would be better for Yami rather than Kagome if you're doing M/F.
person Pharaonic Guardian
schedule December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE! Check your facts before you continue!!
1. In Ancient Egypt, the Pharaoh would marry his own daughter before he’d marry any ole' woman. It was required that the Pharaoh marry within royal blood ONLY.
2. I don’t believe the Ancient Egyptians even knew what a wolf was! Jackals, yes, Wolves.......hell no. A wolf would cook to death in the desert.
3. Sex was regarded differently in Ancient Egypt. Basically, you could fuck whoever you wanted until you were married. Once you tied the knot, it was monogamy all the way. Virginity wasn’t really a *special* thing.
I don’t want to discourage you from writing, but in order to make a good story, you need to research your topic more thoroughly. You have potential to be a decent fic writer, but you need to pay more attention to details. Readers appreciate accuracy.