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This is getting really good, and you have 4000 hits! (I think that makes sense.XP) That's a pretty high number for an anime story!

Evil Nakazawa (probably selt wrong but you know who I mean) He is evil! I hates him so much!!! Poor Ryou-chan! *glomps Ryou* I lvoes him and feels so sorry for him! Poor poor Ryou-chan!

Poor Ryou! His foster family is very homophobic - the poor dear. Can't wai tfor another chapter! I absolutly need to find out what happens! Lovies the story!

*shakes with anger* Ryou's foster family makes me so physically ill, it isn't even funny.. I hope Bakura sends them all to the shadow realm after they get Ryou back... Or I may have to go bust their heads myself. >.< But, I love your story!

Kuragari, you might believe it. However, that doesn't mean that *I* am contractually obligated to believe it, and I have every right to state my opinion. I like things to make sense. I enjoy them *more* when I can actually believe that within the context of a given universe, they stand a chance of happening. We are not all thinking with *your* brain. All I asked was for a little true believability. I wonder when that became offensive.

Truth is stranger than fiction because fiction (EVEN FANFICTION) has to MAKE SENSE. Or it should. It's better when it does.

My dear author, I'm terribly afraid that your use of plot devices over actual *plot* has finally ruined this story for me. I like the concept of Otogi/Bakura but this story isn't about them. It's about all the horrible things that just kind of generally happen *to* them, and the people here just aren't Otogi and Bakura in any way, shape, or form. Your characterization needs intense work if you want to get better, and I like to think you *would* like to get better. Even if I'm wrong, I'm going to think it anyway. The random insertion of Ryou with a family that's just so CONVENIENTLY against one of his great pleasures (and which will probably freak out like stereotypical families like this always do when they find out he's gay) killed it for me.

I can suspend my disbelief for a lot of things. But that finally shattered it. Good-bye.

I agree with Shawaazu, that WAS fast! I love this story!


Note to Drive By Person: Don't be such an ass. It's a fanfic, anything can happen. It wouldn't really matter if Ryou was a foot away from a bomb, it exploded, and Ryou was cured from an illness because of the bomb exploding. One plus six can equal a dirty napkin. It's a story, fiction, fantasy (sp?), made up, not real. Who cares?! They ate lassanga in chapter eleven, and that's American food. Who cares about the facts? It doesn't matter if Hato Chiisai knows that at Ryou's age, he can live by himself. I know that and I don't give a damn.

0_o what do they do? What do they do what do they do what do they do??????? I need to know *grovels at teh wise and mighty hato's feet* please oh great authoress bestow your updating upon us! Thine story is deliciously devine and we cannot wait ages to know the outcome!

*grin*

Well, that was quick! Keep up the good work! :D

Finally! Thanks for updating, love your story!^__^

I know you're just using it for angst-value but you might want to put in a note that this isn't how Japanese Social Services work. Because he's almost of age, Bakura's father could've easily arranged for him to legally live alone. It's been done in Japan before. I'm certain a short time of research could provide the information, if you wanted it. After all, he lives without his family in canon and no one's done anything to bring Social Services "down on him". It didn't even seem to startle anyone that he lived alone. I know it was for the story, but really the fact that it was a *problem* threw me out of the believablity of the story. I'm just having problems with the whole thing by now, honestly. I guess I just thought Otogi was smarter than all of this, as well as much more cunning. He's not actively *doing* anything but whining a lot. That's not the Otogi I know. He's not using his mind at all. He's basically just curling up and going "wah, wah, wah, I can't do anything." What, he can't tape the encounters with what's his name and use them as evidence? They happen in HIS place. Just being a cop doesn't make him all powerful. They have crooked cops all the time. And none of the other officers notice him doing anything odd, or notice the extra money going into his bank account? I think you might've mentioned something about why he can't tape earlier, I just don't remember it at the moment.

But please, have him *do* something. It's sickening the way it is.