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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sorry, I know it was a serious chapter... but I just couldn't help snickering at weird parts. Yup, parts aren't the only thing that's weird. La
“Now she will be enticed to mate with Umi. She can’t fight my power."
*snerk* yami viagra....
"Don’t you enjoy being in the arms of a living god?”
*laughs* I think given the choice he'd rather be with a dead god...
“That’s the last time today I am falling on my ass!”
*starts line to make sure he falls on his ass tomorrow*
The insect attempted to step on Bakura, slamming its claws around him.
Okay, turn about is fair play: bug steps on man. *snerks*
“But…it’s two in the afternoon.”
I love it when guys say stuff like this!
“Now she will be enticed to mate with Umi. She can’t fight my power."
*snerk* yami viagra....
"Don’t you enjoy being in the arms of a living god?”
*laughs* I think given the choice he'd rather be with a dead god...
“That’s the last time today I am falling on my ass!”
*starts line to make sure he falls on his ass tomorrow*
The insect attempted to step on Bakura, slamming its claws around him.
Okay, turn about is fair play: bug steps on man. *snerks*
“But…it’s two in the afternoon.”
I love it when guys say stuff like this!
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April 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Holy crap, that Yami sure has a good right hook! Ka-Bam! One punch- Ryou down! Poor Ryou..he's gonna feel that one in the one morning...Owe.
How cute, Bakura named his dagger 'Gorgeous'. *giggles* I like it!
Uh....Aria honey? Umi's not a trampoline. Take it easy on the boy! ::dies laughing::
Enjoy your vacation, hun! You deserve it!! (You'll still duel me though, right? *giggles*)
How cute, Bakura named his dagger 'Gorgeous'. *giggles* I like it!
Uh....Aria honey? Umi's not a trampoline. Take it easy on the boy! ::dies laughing::
Enjoy your vacation, hun! You deserve it!! (You'll still duel me though, right? *giggles*)
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April 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hmm...i think the pacing of the last two chapters were quite fast for my liking, although i'm really happy that you considered the idea of including Ryou in Yami's revenge. However, i was really hoping that Ryou's inclusion in his revenge would be some kind of psychological and emotional warfare against the Itemris and Ishtars, and not because Yami hated him for giving birth to both Aria and Aten or "making" Yugi turn against the pharaoh (like striking on the enemy's vulnerable yet "innocent" spot; by innocent, i meant someone who didn't have anything against the pharaoh in the first place---since the pharaoh was one of Ryou's friends in the beginning). I really was worried when you left a note hinting that there would be a possible lemon between Ryou and Yami, and was then deeply relieved when you decided not to push through^_^In my opinion, it would be better if you make Yami execute all of his plans first, leaving all of his enemies totally helpless (emotionally, psychologically, and physically) against him before claiming his "trophy,"a YamixRyou lemon maybe...?you decide("---A sword in the gut is not enough, he has to twist it a little...---")
About the mystery guy, I hope it's not Ryou's father (I really hate him for treating his son and grandson like that! He's a total scumbag!) but if it's him...I guess Ryou and Aten's in for another torture of a lifetime huh?What else...oh yeah, you haven't answered my question regarding Diabound...(pouts)I'm sorry if i'm really persistent about this, but when i was watching the episodes wherein he fought Yami Yugi and Yami Marik in batteship arena, i really find it unfair for Bakura to duel, with Dark Necrofear as his trump card, against both yamis who hold egyptian god cards. Don't get me wrong, i think his occult deck is really powerful (not to mention creepy) but when you wrote about Aria's Nightmare Dragon, I just thought that giving Bakura Diabound to control in your story would even out power among the yamis. If you haven't checked on Diabound, I highly recommend Missq's site (Bakura's Nightmare). Please comment on this, okay?
Lastly, just some questions that are bothering me regarding everyone's past lives in ancient egypt. First is about Seto and Ryou's relationship back when Ryou was Rayna. If Aria was Seth's wife, then what is Rayna's relationship with Seth? And who's Bakura's real love interest back then? Was it Rayna or Marik?Where was Rayna when Aten and Aria fought Yami in a duel? And finally, where was Rayna when Bakura died(or was he executed?)? See you next chappie!^_^
Note: Hmm...of Yami kissing Ryou, does this hint of him having a thing for the hikari in the future?
About the mystery guy, I hope it's not Ryou's father (I really hate him for treating his son and grandson like that! He's a total scumbag!) but if it's him...I guess Ryou and Aten's in for another torture of a lifetime huh?What else...oh yeah, you haven't answered my question regarding Diabound...(pouts)I'm sorry if i'm really persistent about this, but when i was watching the episodes wherein he fought Yami Yugi and Yami Marik in batteship arena, i really find it unfair for Bakura to duel, with Dark Necrofear as his trump card, against both yamis who hold egyptian god cards. Don't get me wrong, i think his occult deck is really powerful (not to mention creepy) but when you wrote about Aria's Nightmare Dragon, I just thought that giving Bakura Diabound to control in your story would even out power among the yamis. If you haven't checked on Diabound, I highly recommend Missq's site (Bakura's Nightmare). Please comment on this, okay?
Lastly, just some questions that are bothering me regarding everyone's past lives in ancient egypt. First is about Seto and Ryou's relationship back when Ryou was Rayna. If Aria was Seth's wife, then what is Rayna's relationship with Seth? And who's Bakura's real love interest back then? Was it Rayna or Marik?Where was Rayna when Aten and Aria fought Yami in a duel? And finally, where was Rayna when Bakura died(or was he executed?)? See you next chappie!^_^
Note: Hmm...of Yami kissing Ryou, does this hint of him having a thing for the hikari in the future?
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April 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I would have left this review last night, but there was a certain (darling) chibi feeding my dueling prowess...*squishes Robbie* Think I should give the Jackal deck another go? *grin*
Wow, I wonder if Ryou will be able to fight Yami's mind control spell! I *really* hope so. Hopefully being around a light again will make old Yams a iddy-biddy bit nicer too. He's sure changed over the years...*sigh*
I loved how Bakura threw Malik in a bush to hide him and than stood there whistling, that was too funny! I'll have to keep that in mind for the next time I'm trying to help a friend shake the fuzz. *snicker*
I loved Marik kicking the ever-living shit out of Barnes... I can't wait until he and Bakura have their magic back, --Barnes is so fucking dead.
Niiiice start to a honeymoon! Jacuzzi sex rocks! *grin*
Super chappie! Wednesday is going to come so slow....
Wow, I wonder if Ryou will be able to fight Yami's mind control spell! I *really* hope so. Hopefully being around a light again will make old Yams a iddy-biddy bit nicer too. He's sure changed over the years...*sigh*
I loved how Bakura threw Malik in a bush to hide him and than stood there whistling, that was too funny! I'll have to keep that in mind for the next time I'm trying to help a friend shake the fuzz. *snicker*
I loved Marik kicking the ever-living shit out of Barnes... I can't wait until he and Bakura have their magic back, --Barnes is so fucking dead.
Niiiice start to a honeymoon! Jacuzzi sex rocks! *grin*
Super chappie! Wednesday is going to come so slow....
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April 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
“I’ve forgotten what a Light tastes like. It’s been so long since I have had the essence of a Light flow through me.”
Uhhhh, someone's been watching too much Star Wars porn... *smirks*
“Okay, what about Chibi Moneybags…"
*snerks* Cuuuuute Wonder how he'll take to being called that....
kill Anzu…bludgeon her with something blunt…..stab her….impale her on a wooden spike.
sounds like a good beginning. Frankly, I say drug Barnes' brat and have him wake up with her.
....Married, in Vegas.
the two squealing girls ran to Bakura and clung to his legs tightly.
“Up, pwease!”
The thief picked the boy up and held him in his arms
*cackles* He's gonna have fun moving with all of them stuck to him like styrofoam with static cling!!
“He looks at fire wike da way my mommy wooks at my daddy!”
*falls over laughing* outta da mouths of babes....
“Yes…and stop calling me that!”
Well that answers my question as to how Mokuba likes being called Chibi Moneybags. *G*
“How *slam* does *slam* it *slam* feel? *slam*”
*waits to see if head opens like a pinata* Awwwww dang, 'Kura stopped him. I was sooo hoping to see it go pop.
*shudders* Only Joey would like snails. That's just nashtay. I don't care how much garlic you put on them, they're still the slimy things that go crunch between your toes when you step on them. BLEAH!
Uhhhh, someone's been watching too much Star Wars porn... *smirks*
“Okay, what about Chibi Moneybags…"
*snerks* Cuuuuute Wonder how he'll take to being called that....
kill Anzu…bludgeon her with something blunt…..stab her….impale her on a wooden spike.
sounds like a good beginning. Frankly, I say drug Barnes' brat and have him wake up with her.
....Married, in Vegas.
the two squealing girls ran to Bakura and clung to his legs tightly.
“Up, pwease!”
The thief picked the boy up and held him in his arms
*cackles* He's gonna have fun moving with all of them stuck to him like styrofoam with static cling!!
“He looks at fire wike da way my mommy wooks at my daddy!”
*falls over laughing* outta da mouths of babes....
“Yes…and stop calling me that!”
Well that answers my question as to how Mokuba likes being called Chibi Moneybags. *G*
“How *slam* does *slam* it *slam* feel? *slam*”
*waits to see if head opens like a pinata* Awwwww dang, 'Kura stopped him. I was sooo hoping to see it go pop.
*shudders* Only Joey would like snails. That's just nashtay. I don't care how much garlic you put on them, they're still the slimy things that go crunch between your toes when you step on them. BLEAH!
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April 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
okay, let's try this again. Only this time, awake.... Sorry about the blank review. I'm sure that I really do have something to say. After all, I'm babbling now aren't I?
Yami looked into the vision before him.
Loookeeeeee, peeping Yami!
“Bakura belongs to me, Mobius. He is mine for eternity. His body should be mine. His soul should be mine. "
Selfish much?
Marik stepped over the two kissing boys laying on the living room floor. “Guys, you’re in the way of traffic.”
LOL hell of a roadblock
"You never know when you’ll need your Rod,”
*snickers* true, true
“It looks like it’s going to ‘moo’ and walk off the table. "
's not meatloaf, it's steak tartar...
Marik crossed his legs and folded his arms. ‘That’s my boy!’
Dude, who knew he could strut sitting down. Tsk, he's got a cookie fixation....
“You’re sweet when you’re not being an ass.”
Marik folded his arms. “I resent that.”
Nooo you mean "I represent that" *snerks*
Malik-poo, boobies? May I just say: EW
yamixryou lemon? Again with the ew. can't he just stay a peeping twit and play with himself?
Yami looked into the vision before him.
Loookeeeeee, peeping Yami!
“Bakura belongs to me, Mobius. He is mine for eternity. His body should be mine. His soul should be mine. "
Selfish much?
Marik stepped over the two kissing boys laying on the living room floor. “Guys, you’re in the way of traffic.”
LOL hell of a roadblock
"You never know when you’ll need your Rod,”
*snickers* true, true
“It looks like it’s going to ‘moo’ and walk off the table. "
's not meatloaf, it's steak tartar...
Marik crossed his legs and folded his arms. ‘That’s my boy!’
Dude, who knew he could strut sitting down. Tsk, he's got a cookie fixation....
“You’re sweet when you’re not being an ass.”
Marik folded his arms. “I resent that.”
Nooo you mean "I represent that" *snerks*
Malik-poo, boobies? May I just say: EW
yamixryou lemon? Again with the ew. can't he just stay a peeping twit and play with himself?
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April 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HAHA! Yami slipped it to Anzu! That's so gross! (Yet totally a riot! Too funny!!!) I hope he catches something from her, that would be like the icing on the cake. *snicker*
Now we get to see how good Bakura is at getting away without the use of shadow magic, should be interesting.
Yami/Ryou lemon? Even though it sounds hot, I'm still a little scared. Hmm...
Now we get to see how good Bakura is at getting away without the use of shadow magic, should be interesting.
Yami/Ryou lemon? Even though it sounds hot, I'm still a little scared. Hmm...
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April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey I like this storie it getiing better as it goes. a ryou and yami yooai that would be intereeestiiing that wouuuld mean yami has gotten to almost eveeryoone willing or nnot . Ihope you don't kill Ryou off. I like how you worded the when Yami said Bakura sis his does that meeean he will try to ccclaim him agian that might be intereestiing if you did. thans keep up the good writing
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April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
As I said to you before. Yami/Ryou ewwww. But, it will help with the sequel as you said. So, get on with it.
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April 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey! i'm sorry i wasn't able to review the chapter before this, it seems my server is having problems. Anyway, i think this chapter is really sad, poor Aria...still, i believe you did a great job in writing how Aria reacted to the whole situation, it really portrayed your characterization of her. This chapter also touched me in many ways, for instance, the scene wherein Bakura was scared out of his wits upon seeing his daughter about to jump into the underworld, as commented by Marik. It goes to show that even a tough and violent Yami like Bakura can show a very soft and weak side whenever a loved one is concerned. Another scene that touched me is when Aria seeked solace and comfort on her brother's side. This scene, i believe, showed that sometimes, there are still some things that only a family member can provide for us.
Although, a scene i must comment on is of that regarding Rhea and Marik. In this chapter, she told Marik that he could count on her to take care of Aten when his time comes, therefore, granting that Marik can come to the underworld anytime he wants, doesn't that mean that reviving Aten once he had died won't be necessary since both father and son can meet each other? (This is in regards with Odion's warning)
Another interesting scene is the one wherein you introduced a mystery character who resides in the shadow realm. Will this character be involved on Yami's plot of revenge or will he be another villain more powerful and dangerous than the pharaoh?
I hope that you could give us readers more information regarding this character on the next chapters.
You have included flashbacks of Seto and Aria's past life in egypt everytime they encounter a familiar situation, does this mean that he and Aria will be involved in a romantic relationship later on? (i really hope not, but if this is a part of your story then so be it)
Lastly, i would like to ask if there would be one or two blood lust "moments" involving the Yamis and their husbands on your future chapters. i was just reading on some of your past stories the other day when i read this scene wherein Bakura tried to suppress his blood lust urges until Ryou got out of their room to avoid hurting him. I think i'm kind of missing scenes like those, because believe it or not, i find them romantic in a way...(sorry for my weird taste of romance)
I guess that's all for now, see you next chapter!
Note: by the way, have you looked up already on diabound? if so, is there a chance that you would include him on your future stories? please comment on this, thank you^_^
Although, a scene i must comment on is of that regarding Rhea and Marik. In this chapter, she told Marik that he could count on her to take care of Aten when his time comes, therefore, granting that Marik can come to the underworld anytime he wants, doesn't that mean that reviving Aten once he had died won't be necessary since both father and son can meet each other? (This is in regards with Odion's warning)
Another interesting scene is the one wherein you introduced a mystery character who resides in the shadow realm. Will this character be involved on Yami's plot of revenge or will he be another villain more powerful and dangerous than the pharaoh?
I hope that you could give us readers more information regarding this character on the next chapters.
You have included flashbacks of Seto and Aria's past life in egypt everytime they encounter a familiar situation, does this mean that he and Aria will be involved in a romantic relationship later on? (i really hope not, but if this is a part of your story then so be it)
Lastly, i would like to ask if there would be one or two blood lust "moments" involving the Yamis and their husbands on your future chapters. i was just reading on some of your past stories the other day when i read this scene wherein Bakura tried to suppress his blood lust urges until Ryou got out of their room to avoid hurting him. I think i'm kind of missing scenes like those, because believe it or not, i find them romantic in a way...(sorry for my weird taste of romance)
I guess that's all for now, see you next chapter!
Note: by the way, have you looked up already on diabound? if so, is there a chance that you would include him on your future stories? please comment on this, thank you^_^