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June 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
YD: YOU'RE DEAD! *lunges at author*
DD: *grabs YD* Hey! Calm down!
YD: She left it right in the middle of the lemon!!
DD: OK, so she did...calm down!
YD: Calm down?! CALM DOWN?!?!
DD: Please update soon...for my safety
DD: *grabs YD* Hey! Calm down!
YD: She left it right in the middle of the lemon!!
DD: OK, so she did...calm down!
YD: Calm down?! CALM DOWN?!?!
DD: Please update soon...for my safety
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June 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I know it's not finished, but it's great and it has awesome potential. The last part leading into the sex is kind of PWP, but I like that stuff...eep eep up with it! ~Nicki
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May 31, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Please continue!!!!!!! This is such a good story!!!!
From,
Ryo Gin
From,
Ryo Gin
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May 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Oooh Yes! MORE NOW DON'T STOP THERE! Jou is funny...neways...like I said this rocks and I wanna see some lemon action in here! Onegai? ARIGATO! ^_^ Jaaa!!!
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May 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
YD: HEHEHEHE!!
DD: Geeze Joey! Be a little less obvious why don't ya!
DD: Geeze Joey! Be a little less obvious why don't ya!
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May 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
YES! I was going to scream at you for making Joey be sooooooo stupid! You saved your ears! More now?Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease?
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May 29, 2003 at 12:00 AM
The concept of the story is good, but just so you know, It's way too fast paced. For being how short the chapters are and being vague on thoughts and emotions it seems rather random to have them already wanting to have sex. Another thing, after one kiss and having your crotch grabbed isn't enough to make you break. I believe Jounouchi would be a lot stronger then that. Like I said you concept is good, along with the word structure and poetry. Just try to put a little more effort into developing things before throwing them into bed.
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May 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Awww, that was a really good poem. I like poem-writing too. ^_^ I love the Kaiba/Jou coupling, hope it all works out in the end.
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May 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
GAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!! You must continue!!!!!!!!!
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May 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Aww.....Seto wrote it didn't he???? You are a really good poet. You really are. It's nice when the words come to you so easily, huh? That's talent! Can't wait for chappie 2