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for Teenage Jail

by rayemars

person amariel
schedule March 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was mostmost well-written rambling of smut I've ever read! And I've read a lot more smut than I should have. It was touching, if rather bittersweet. It was beautiful. I'm so glad you tied up the plot that way. Aw! I could gush for hours!
person Pachelbel
schedule February 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Heh. I've been obsessed with this fanfic for much, much too long. I mean...it's probably my favorite Malik/Bakura fic ever. It's definitely my most-read favorite fanfic of all time. It's quite possibly the reason I nearly failed my journalism class. Sure, all the good students were doing their articles; Pachelbel was reading smut! ...And what's truly sad about that is, I think I'd probably *still* choose 'Teenage Jail' over boosting my grade. Poor student, or freakily dedicated reader? I try to be a little of both ;p

I have to say, I never thought about socks in sex scenes before. I mean, I guess I did to the point where I thought fanarts were more cute than "steamy" if the socks were left on, but...

Your characterizations are just...spot-on, but it's such a rarity in any fandom to have a character so neatly *in-character* that I'm always incredibly disappointed when I see you haven't added to the Bakura/Malik-ness of this fandom.

Agh, it's 4 in the morning, I really shouldn't be reviewing, but I've read and re-read this fic so many times over the past year I figured I'd better get around to the feedback at some point. If I waited any longer the rambling would run into raving and you'd have a 4-page review to wade through, and nice as that may seem, A) my hands would fall off before I finished, and B) Do you really want to take an hour to read a review?

So, I'll cut it off with just letting you know this story is amazing and I love it and *cough*I'dloveitifyouwrotemoreBakura/Maliksmut*cough*.
person Elle-Fate2x1
schedule November 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I love the last sentence it was cute. This fic was awsome!! I've just recently started reading your works and I love them!!! Your're such an amazing author!!! Teenage Jail was a wonderful fic and I really really enjoyed reading it!
person Verinia
schedule May 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
You have achieved the rare effect of forcing me to have a deep emotional response to a piece of fanfiction. *Very* nice job, you handled the mental instabilities of both boys very well.
person Artemis
schedule May 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter. *grins* You’re one of the people I know who can actually write a good Yami Bakura. Keep it up! I maintain that the only reason this fic came about, was because you penned up all of your YGO sexual tensions, and thus this is the consequence. Not that I minded for a second. *winks*

I especially liked the scene where Rishid walks in on th I j I just liked the whole blink part. I actually pictured it. *snicker*

Anyway, great job. And an ambiguous ending is just as likely to be a happily-never-after ending as a happily-ever-after ending. And if you ever question it…eh…just write a chapter for yourself where Ryou can’t deal with it and commits suicide. Ooh, maybe even have Isis find him. *steeples fingers* Ah, the evilness…

Anyway! Awesome fic!

~Artemis Z.
person Slytherinette
schedule May 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I liked it. I liked it lots!
person Elys
schedule May 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE ONE MORE CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OR..OR AT LEST MAKE A SEQUL (I know i didn't spell that right but you know what i mean) PLEASE!!!!!!!! Youe ofe of my favorit authors and one of the best in my opinon (i know i propablely didn't spell that right ether but you Know) PLEASE I'M BEGGING YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is a great story please make a sequl at lest.
(making Puppy eyes while saying this) Please Please please please please please please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I absolutely love this story.
person Lady Yami Bakura
schedule May 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
whoa... this story keeps getting better every time I read it. It's perpetually disturbing but at the same time really human, I feel bad for both Malik and Bakura having to go through that and really a happy ending at this point seems impossiable but ever still it's a truly amazing piece of work especially if you like phycology. I'm beyond impressed, this fic turned into much more then just casual yaoi and pointless lemon scenes. Wonderful job ^_^

-Lady Yami Bakura (fanfic.net author)
schedule May 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
LD: Well that was interesting
Karen: But not bad at all. I mean, of course Ryou and Malik would have issues... look at what they went through with their yamis.
LD: Yeah, so considering that, and the nature of the story as a whole, it was a really good ending.
Karen: Yeah, for once I think the stereotypical happy ending would have been totally out of place.
LD: Plus it would have ruined the wonderful angstiness!
Karen: You should write more stories. This one is really good!
person KK^_^
schedule May 8, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I am so horrendously hooked on this(just read part 5). So it was supposed to be a one shot, if it was I wouldn't have more to come back to, would I? So Malik knows he copied the heiroglyphs... Now what's he gonna do? You better update and tell us all soon!

^_^