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February 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting as always. Can't wait what happenes next ^-^ Update asap
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November 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, still a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, so much so that it hurts to read and I can hardly understand what’s going on. It also seems like words are missing from sentences, thus the flow is broken as the reader is jarred into having to figure out what it is that you’re writing about, that is a big problem. You also switch from past to present tense a lot, another big problem; pick a tense, preferably past as that’s what most readers and writers favor. Outside of the blatant OOCness, if you fix these problems you might have a decent story on your hands.
Also, its Duke DEVLIN, Mai VALINTINE, and Téa GARDNER. There is no excuse for having their names spelled wrong.
Also, its Duke DEVLIN, Mai VALINTINE, and Téa GARDNER. There is no excuse for having their names spelled wrong.
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November 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I've never seen the show, but I'm liking the story anywayKeepKeep it up the good work baby :o)
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October 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I think you've got a great plotline shaping up here, and I look forward to more. The spelling and grammar errors are minor, and I wouldn't mind helping you fix them (I'm an English major, so I have to proofread my work all the time). Drop me a line if you're interested. Anyway, hope the wng png process is going well!
Sincerely,
Robin
Sincerely,
Robin
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October 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!!......so cool, I want to make a P/T for such a long time, but I never could figure how to make one. ^_^ Anyway please update soon?!?!
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October 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It’s Téa Gardner, not Téa Granger. Also there’s a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes.
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October 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey I'm really liking the plot, sounds fun. Keep up the good work.
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October 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Cool where did you think of a story like that?
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October 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh I hope this will be a Seto/Téa vampire fic, since there are not very many of these around. I can't wait till you update this one, it's definitely going to be worth it.
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October 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Holy Crap! O_O You just had to stop there *raised a fist* You have to update I must know what's gonna happen! Oh and by the way you should check the spelling okay and also the fact that you got some words mixed up as well. N-e-ways, I just thought you wanted to know that. Also the fact this is getting real interesting. You gotta up! You hear me!