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by Aten

person MarikIshtar77
schedule October 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hot damn, girl! The muses have certainly earned their overtime pay this chapter! I'm speechles........seriously great job. I didn't even realize I'd hit the "loop" button on my cd player and was listening to "Creeping Death" over and over and over.......
You totally out did yourself this time, two phenomenal lemons and cars ing ing up. Not cool that it's Marik blowing up, but still, I love that kind of shit. I know you wouldn't kill off a hot piece of man candy like Marik though.
*after thought* Too bad nic nic was standing in the path of Marik's car picking up a shiny new nickle.......
*hugs*
person Kat
schedule October 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
A devilish smile crossed Tristan’s face. “Are you going to wear the frilly pink apron when you cook it?”
*cheers* YAAAAY

A playful slap from the Dice Master elicited a bigger evil grin. “You know I will, Silly Buns!”
*howls* Silly Buns!? I love it!!

Tristan grinned. “Looking forward to….stuffing the turkey with you.”
Otogi licked his lips. “Mmm…stuffing the turkey.”
*chokes on soda* Oh my god... *falls over laughing*

Wow! I knew Robbie was smart but I didn't realize that he was that gifted. *snickers* Love the interaction between Daniel and Tristan. I'd almost feel sorry for anyone that pissed them both off at the same time. I said _almost_.

Seto, don't be an ass, don't be an ass, don't be an ass... YAAAAAAAAY He didn't blow it! Oooo even he said he was being an ass.

*cackles* Of course Asher's last name would be Sparx.*laughs hysterically*

whoa... I think that's the most Asher has said, Ever!

Damn, I love it when Seto goes all 'grrr' and dictator-like. *grins evilly* He's just so sexy that way!

*snickers* Malik... bendable. *drools*

Seto held up his hand. “I’ve had my brother tellhis his girlfriend is pregnant, my expert thief is pregnant, and I was shot in the ankle yesterday. The last thing I need to hear about is your and Bakura’s sex lives. I’ve been traumatized enough.”
*blinks innocently* I haven't been traumatized enough...

"Philosophical Marik did not appear many times."
*nods* true, but it's wonderful when he does show up, even during such awful circumstances.

Damn... Joey's drunk?! Ugh, drunk Joey and Serenity at the dinner table... Gee, can we hope he barfs in her lap? *crosses toes and continues to read* “Shut. The. Fuck. Up.” Ooooo I think.... *blinks* I think that was better that barfing in her lap! *thinks and nods* Yup, it was better!

“One comment….one word against my child or the way that we live…..I will personally rip out your intestines with my teeth. Understand?”
Oooooo I wanna see that! Dude, just floss afterwards!

“Aten, I said, ‘Get off OF me’ NOT ‘Get off ON me!’”
Aten snickered. “Well, I am dyslexic, you know.”
“Nice excuse.”
*falls over laughing* One Million Points to Aten for that resp





Okay, I'm not gonna cry because of what they're doing to Robbie and Aten... I'm not gonna cry. *sniffles* again.

Oooo Yami Aten's coming?! Hot damn!

Fantastic chapter!!
person Uke Kit and Uke Io.
schedule October 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Uke Kit: Nice chapter~! ....chapters...hehe, just had to catch up on my reading. ^-^hehehee.

Uke Io: Hey! the end of this chapter reminded me of something!!!! What the HELL ever happened to Aku??? Ryou's other yami.???????????????????? I know they didn't kill him. <_< >_> so then where did he go???
person Kat
schedule October 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
“When the baby arrives, can it sleep in my room? Please? I’m a light sleeper!”
*groans* UH OHHHH

Seto narrowed his eyes. “Get out of here.”
Idiot, idiot, idiot. You big idiot.

Anzu reached out to touch the man’s beard. “You’re fuzzy like a little bunny!”
*laughs* Oh feck...

The man stepped away. “What is the matter with you?”
*laughs hysterically* Now dude, that's a loooooooooong lis



*wipes eyes* Anzu would the be the only person who could scare away a room full of men like that....

Poor Hayden. Aten's strength just becomes more and more apparent! Damn, he's good.

“Anzu! For the first time in my life, I’m glad to see you!”
*checks outside to see if pigs are airborn yet*

Vinnie grinned. This girl was obviouslythrethreat. And, as frightening as she looked, tail was tail.
*squeaks* ewwwwwwwwwwww w eww ew ew ew

Aten shrugged with a smile. “Flattery will get you everywhere, Robbie Morgan.”
*laughs* Aten flirts like Miranda!

“No, I’m just Aten. Just plain, old, regular, boring Aten.”
Tch, no such thing!!!

Yaaaaay Daniel's back! Oooo I can't wait to see how he reacts to Asher's comments about Miranda being pretty. *cackles*

Aria growled. “My face is not my breasts, Umi.”
*howls* Ohhh that's funny!!! Damned good thing Bakura's out.

“UMI AND ARIA ARE KISSING! OH MY GOD! OH MY GOD! OH MY GOD!”
*laughs harder* Yup, good thing Bakura's out.... A really good thing.

*shudders* Charlie wanting to put Aten to the test?? Ohhh, the poor wee thing!

Damn girl. Great chapter! I'm gonna hope for Tuesday. *G*

Kat
person Tifter
schedule October 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Damn, do you EVER check for mistakes in spelling, gender and story plot???
Give it up!!
person Caterfree
schedule October 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Konichiiwa

*Mouth hangs wide open* Anzu is a bigger moron then I though she was. I though she'd AT LEAST be able to idfy pfy people in a picture in Real life!!! RA, SHE IS SO STUPID A NAIL HAS MORE N CEN CELLS THAT SHE DOES!!!!!!
Kyasarin: Same with you...
Caterfree: TOJIKOMERU!!!!! (Shut up in Japanese) *Whacks Kyasarin with giant mallet* Wasn't as stressful as other chapters, so Kya won't have to get supplies for tonight, but still, Damn! I can't wait until Tuesday! I'll crack! *Goes into fetal position* Damn it. Damn it. Damn it. Damn it. Damn it. Damn it.

Ja Ne! ^_~
person Caterfree10
schedule October 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Koncihiiwa!

NANI?!?!?!?! Vincent was OTOGI'S BOYFRIEND BEFO?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! WTFH?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
Kyasarin: i'll be off getting supplies for her now before I'm thrown out... *Goes off to convinience store*
Caterfree: GRRR!!!! DAMN!!! *Ahem* Anyways, YAY LIME AND LEMON! ^_^ Limes are good.... LEmons are good..... oh and one more thi*In *In response to Aria after the mindlink flood* Oh fuck. Oh fuck. Oh fuck. Oh fuck. Oh fuck. Oh fuck. Oh fuck. Oh fuck. *I think you get the point*

Ja Ne! ^_~
person Kat
schedule October 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhhhh laptop needs work. That's why you updated early! Damn, you scared the snot out of me. I thought I'd slept right through Wednesday and was now late for work!

Gods, where to start? That lime between Aten and Robbie was wonderful. Especially with how Robbie handled Aten's fear. That was just so sweet!

The lemon with Bakura, Malik and Ryou? Damned effing hot!! I'd forgotten how playful Malik can be, the stinker. *smirks*

Vinnie dated Mirand and Otogi!? Okay, I'm not that surprised, but I was cheering every time one of them landed a slap, punch or backhand on the guy. That was good!! Yaaaaaaaay Tristan to save the day! Ohhhhh, I hope Maxine finds where the boys are.

I'll keep my toes crossed that you get your laptop back for saturday.

Kat
person MarikIshtar77
schedule October 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
WOW! *hugz* That chapter kicked serious butt! Lemon AND lime?!? Who'd have ever thought that sour fruits could be so sweet! I can't help but feel sorry for Umi though. Aten has a little fun and Aria gets rabid. LOL That was awesome! I love Bakura's fishy euphemisms.....Umi better be careful or he might just wake up with his errr.......Rapala missing one morning! eek!
Keep up the great work!
*hugz*
Caroline
person Bealmira
schedule October 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is... amasing. Nerve-racking, shocking... It's even scary at times. I love it. You are such a freaking talented author and I am both in awe of you and envying you abilities.

Serenity's a bitch, huh? I never really liked here, but this is kind of making me hate her... It's great how you've done that too. It takes a lot of talent to make a sweet, innocent little girl into a homosexual-hating, prejudiced whore and I love you for that. *grins*

I think Robbie and Aten act a little young though... They're twelve, right? That means at least sixth grade though, and that means that they can at least write correctly. Well, unless they have really crappy education... *grins* But yeah, they're acting a little young too. I'm pretty sure that by the time I was in middle school, I'd stopped calling my parents 'mommy' and 'daddy' and knew a least a little bit about the facts of life. But yeah...

Anyway, I love you fic, it's gorgeous. Please, please, please, please, please keep it up. Too many good authors have just up and disappeared, never to finish their fics. Again, it's beautifully sad and I'm jealous of you as an author. Love you, please update soon!