rate_review Reviews

story isn't bad so far..the second chapter posted is the same as the first but with more added to the end.

love the fic, but chapter 2 and all of 9 except the disclaimer and author's notes are missing...

Interesting fic... I really liked the story line, but it was so annoyingly written. Everything that happened in it was good, but I was definitely surprised to see the term "college" pop up in an author's note. The first chapter and the last two were decently written, but the middle ones were just painful in terms of things like grammar, spelling, and typos. You even had what looked like AIM screennames still in there, like you had done a sloppy job of copy-and-pasting from an IM log and hadn't done any proofreading at all. I'll hand it to you that the story flowed, because often dual-written fics suffer from a struggle for storyline- and characterization-dominance between the authors, which this one did not. And it's also good that you two were at the same skill level, because a dual-written fic that's written half-decently, half-horribly is even worse to read than constant flaws... but I still wish you two had spent more time proofing, or if you're both non-native English speakers and really couldn’t do any better than this, gotten yourself a beta-reader. Since the plot had no flaws, that kind of beta-reading really isn't hard at all.

I did read the story through to the end, though, and I'm glad I did. It had a really interesting plotline that was well tied-together, and I agreed with or at least enjoyed most of your characterizations. It had lots of lovely angst and was really engaging, doing a good job of making the reader empathize with the characters. It's in fact BECAUSE it had these strong good qualities that I'm reviewing it so harshly, because with a little more work it could have been a very, very good fic, as compared to just, "Eh, halfway decent if you're in a relaxed enough mood to deal with it." I wish I could recommend it to my friends, but because of all the language errors, I really can't. So I wish you would put this effort into your future fics, because you really seem to have potential.

This was a wonderful story. I really don't see why people flamed. It was clear what kind of story it was so if they didn't like that kind of thing they shouldn't even bother reading. I quite enjoyed it though and it had a wonderful ending.

Me again. I don't care what others think or say I like your stories

Dude! I loved this fic! All tied up and just want to say this rocked and for all the flames you may have gotten those poeple suck if they dotn like it then they dont need to read but i loved it and you had really good lemons. And you were totally into it on Ryou when he was in his state of shock as sad as it was u.u but it all turned out for the better *cheers* seto died! Yay! Anywho this was kick ass and you are so on my favorite right now!

That was a great story!!! Wowwies!! I totally loved it!!! It's sucj an awsome fic!!!! Way cool!!!!!! Yay Yugi/Ryou/Yami!

That was amazing!!! Oh I loved it!!! After all the torture a little bit of fluff is nice! You know what they say a litbit bit of fluff goes along way!! ... or was that love??? *shrug* Loved the chappy!!! Oh can't wait until the next uppydate!!! It's 1:00 am!! yay!!! It's 1am do you know where you're parents are???? Hai!!!!!!! well gtg now!!! I value my life! Byedie bye!!!

Hey! How have you been doing over these months? Sorry I haven't chat or reveiw(your stories) for a while because I don't have internet X_X (my cousin does...) Anyway, I think you and Mally-chan umm...writing stories together is an great idea!!!! Just don't abuse Ryou toooo much.O_o I love you both writing fanfictions together...it's fun and longer!! It doesn't matter if not much people enjoy this fanfic, because what it matters is your...how should I say this?...enjoyment!(yea, that's the word I think.XP) You and Mally-chan like writing fictions, right? Then just go for it.^_^I'll LOVED to read it! Anyway, please reveiw! ^_^v good luck mate.(stupid habit from cousin...X_x)

Oh my god, that was such a wonderful chappie! It was like three almost, and I really enjoyed reading it. I'm so glad that Ryou is finally home, and I bet he's gonna get better, huh? (Guess that's a prerequisite of the YY/R/Y lemon.) And I love it when Bakura and Yami get along. Bakura is so funny, I lurves it!!! Can't wait for the next chappie! ^_^