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Oh gawd, that's funny. it's Yami playing too hard that is bruising Ry and they all think it's Baku; the overprotective one. lol

Just as the story synopsis stated. lol

I hope Yami Malik , Bakura, and Ryou hook up like in the other fic. lol I'll just roll. Well, I'm only on 5 and you have a ton of chapters written.. so I guess I'll see. ROFL

awww, so Ry didn't get laid by Marik but he did get skull F*ed. LOL

ok, Baku is a sweetie here.
This was a good and different fic. people shouldn't worry about writing them out of character so much if you aren't meaning it to be cannonish anyway. That's the joy of ficdom. lol

Overall this was a nice story.
It had a really good plot.

You have a good idea here, but some of the way your writing flows needs work. Try not to use Ryou said and Yami said with all your words this drove me so crazy I had to stop reading the fic. Maybe try to add more actions and it's (you're) in you are.

What an excellent story!!
I loved this!! Really and truly! ^__^
Well done huni!!
Much Luv
Debs xxx