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by BishojoShadow

person Anon
schedule July 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thats Hard core heavy shit...sweet motherf****** That was deep...So sad...MALIK!...Dear Ra!!!...Oh Gods!!...AMAZING!
person Millie Ishtar Motou
schedule May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WHY DO YOU LIKE HURTING YUGI?? its not fair he doesn't deserve it!!! and when will the Real pairings start?? and whats with Ryou Joey thing??? I mean ewww!!
person Yamima
schedule May 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What happens next? Keep going
person Yamima
schedule April 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My goodness this took me a while to read but it was worth it

great job
person aspiker
schedule April 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was pretty good! The description of Malik's growing unease and fear were well done. 8-)
person Kotori
schedule April 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ohh poor Malik...hope his friends save him!
Please keep going!
person Silveriss
schedule April 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! You're writing again. ^^ I'm still waiting for my happy ending...

Otherwise, wonderful job, as always.
person ShadowSlayer (Too lazy to log in)
schedule March 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Have I ever told you that you are my absolute favorite yaoi author?! This was an awsome story and I can't wait for you to finish it! I want to find out what happens to Ryou! Not to meantion what's going to happen with Joey and Kaiba... I can so see them ending up together... big happy ending... =^-^=
person anonymous
schedule March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very cool..update soon!!! ^_^
person Malik
schedule February 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi again!
I wrote a review before, but when I did this, I have read only two chapters of your story.
*baka desu*
Now I give you a longer comment than then ^.^
This story is very interesting including the length of the chapters. The first of them are very long ><
My own fics where I thought, they’re long look old against your chapters.
But don’t worry ^^ That is very good! Your fic is one of the best and longest fics I’ve read before. ^^ That is one fic, you can read long and it doesn’t end that quick.
So.. And now to the story! XD
I think the story is a good idea. At the beginning I thought, you would bring more scenes with Malik, but then you wrote mostly about Ryou and Yugi. It is my opinion, because Malik is my favorite Character in Yugioh.
It is also a little bit odd, that Marik stay together with Ryou. I think they don’t fit together. ><”
(okay.. Except of that I like Marik as an sadistic bastard..)
The last chapters with the photography is a little pervert.. >< I haven’t read something like this before.. I also wonder that you can upload such a story. In Germany you haven’t to upload this. They delete the story. ><”
But the idea itself is good. I wonder I haven’t got such a idea before.. I like it when Ryou suffers.. *evilsmirk* I hate this boy in a way.. (but I write a lot of Fics of him and Bakura >_>...)
I would really like to know what has happened in Maliks past.. I hope you write this quick and upload it in the next time. ^^ Please.. let Malik more suffer than Ryou and Yugi together >.< *beg*
P l e a s e!!!
I think you`ve write good, a lot and in a way exciting! You’ve got many ideas and that are aspects I like ^^
But now.. I beg again to write quick and go.
I think in this review are a lot of grammatical mistakes.. Please don’t look at them. I’m from Germany and I’m not good in English >< If I would be better, I would write more than this short comment..
Bye bye
Greez
Malik