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October 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness. Paragraphs! Please!
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October 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WOAH....that was.....fucking crazy.......and yet I couldn't stop reading......WTF??
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October 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was my frist time haveing anything to do with AB and i liked it sort of it was good but odd you should get a proofreader mine really helped me make my story better
With love;Imasuky Lomae
With love;Imasuky Lomae
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October 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was kinda sick but i liked it you should update and space it
The Sexy Slave Tia
The Sexy Slave Tia
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August 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damn, that was hot.
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August 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damn, that was hot.
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November 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Holy Crap! I can't read that! I'm not about to read it now, but next time you update, SPACE! SPACE LIKE THERE'S NO TOMORROW! DOUBLE SPACE, IN FACT!
And with that, I go. *Flies out with cape billowing behind*
And with that, I go. *Flies out with cape billowing behind*
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July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Erm... this was rather interesting. Granted I'm not all for the whole Tea calling out Yami's name thing, at least I was able to read that much. Heh... but yeah. Take it from a fellow writer:
Paragraphs are your friends. *Nods* So are proper punctuation and spelling.
Paragraphs are your friends. *Nods* So are proper punctuation and spelling.
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November 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Creepy..very creepy..but good too.
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September 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ok, Great fic, but I agree with your other reviewers. You need to put double enters between paragraphs,
like
this.
It makes it soooooo much easier to read.
Also, I don't claim to be an excelent speller, I know I'm awful, but don't you have a spall checker on the program you use to type? If not, why don't you get someone to beta for you?
Finally, you labled the seperate chapters, but why didn't you post them seperatly? Why put it all at once?
Please don't be offended by what I've said, I'm not trying to be mean, this fic is really good, but I did get a headache while reading it. >.< Not something I enjoy.
Anyways, Laters! ^_~
like
this.
It makes it soooooo much easier to read.
Also, I don't claim to be an excelent speller, I know I'm awful, but don't you have a spall checker on the program you use to type? If not, why don't you get someone to beta for you?
Finally, you labled the seperate chapters, but why didn't you post them seperatly? Why put it all at once?
Please don't be offended by what I've said, I'm not trying to be mean, this fic is really good, but I did get a headache while reading it. >.< Not something I enjoy.
Anyways, Laters! ^_~