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More Yami/Anzu PLZ

O.o...this made absolutely no sense...

This fic has people OOC - Mai would never have sex with Yugi.

Also, you mix up names...
Anzu is used in the Japanese versions and the English manga
Joey is restricted to the English anime and video games

Please space out your story. It's all one big block, and no one can read it.
Even so, there are many other things that are wrong with it, including the descriptions of sex.

Firstly, virgins do not "leak blodd" during sex. it's more like light spotting, and if one has used tampons on a regular basis beforehand, there is virtually none at all.

Secondly, an 11 inch penis is no cause for celebration. It's a medical emergency. Most women's "love cana;s" are only six inches deep, and if a man has any more than seven inches fully erected, he will cause a woman severe pain fom hitting up on the cervix.

OK, that's all for now, I just had to clear those biggies up for ya!

Also, 11 inches is way too big for a penis. One can't do much with 11 inches as it can't fit in a vagina or mouth.

And blood doesn't "gush" out of a vagina - it's more subtle, and only with girls who haven't had sex before.

This story sucked. That's not how real sex is.

Also, please do something about the block paragraph.

I like it, really. I hope you continue to write. Maybe another Anzu/Yami story.