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July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please Update!1 This story is da BOMB!! And I rate this 10 stars!!
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June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
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>o< OH MY GOD!!! >o<
I feel Bakura's PAIN!!! YEARGH!!! Oh man, I'M GOIN CRAZY!! This is THE HOTTEST story i've read in a while! I'm panting and drooling and all sorts of lusty things from just reading this! OH MAN!! SO much angst and torture and tastiness!! I know I'm gonna feel better when Bakie finally cums!!! You are a cruel master!! Not only do you deny the theif king, but you deny ME!! AGGH!! I need to go attack my boyfirend right now...
OH GOD!!!! UPDATE SOON!!! PLEASE!!!!!!
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>o< OH MY GOD!!! >o<
I feel Bakura's PAIN!!! YEARGH!!! Oh man, I'M GOIN CRAZY!! This is THE HOTTEST story i've read in a while! I'm panting and drooling and all sorts of lusty things from just reading this! OH MAN!! SO much angst and torture and tastiness!! I know I'm gonna feel better when Bakie finally cums!!! You are a cruel master!! Not only do you deny the theif king, but you deny ME!! AGGH!! I need to go attack my boyfirend right now...
OH GOD!!!! UPDATE SOON!!! PLEASE!!!!!!
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April 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE THIS STORY!!! Why havent you updated yet?! sheesh, and such a wonderful story too. You rating is soo messed up. It should be 10 starz!! yup, yup. PWEASE review as soon as posible!!! I'm so dying from the suspense!! hehe.... love Ryou's personality!!
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December 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God!!! than was such a hot story! You just have to continue! No, you will continue!! E-mail me when you have done chapter six! I am just DYING to find out what happens next!! ^_^* !!
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November 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
HOly shit, I've been waiting for this fic to update forever... and then my computer goes kaput for three months, and I come back to a lovely two chapters... I love you! *glomps*
Ryou is soo naughty... but we like him that way. ^^ The bits with Bakura teasing/testing the other males was nice... but the reaction gotten from his then 'mystery' lover was even better... who knew Ryou could be such a posessive creature? *grins* I'm looking forward to the next chapter, whever you manage to get it out. ^___^
Ryou is soo naughty... but we like him that way. ^^ The bits with Bakura teasing/testing the other males was nice... but the reaction gotten from his then 'mystery' lover was even better... who knew Ryou could be such a posessive creature? *grins* I'm looking forward to the next chapter, whever you manage to get it out. ^___^
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November 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
HOly shit, I've been waiting for this fic to update forever... and then my computer goes kaput for three months, and I come back to a lovely two chapters... I love you! *glomps*
Ryou is soo naughty... but we like him that way. ^^ The bits with Bakura teasing/testing the other males was nice... but the reaction gotten from his then 'mystery' lover was even better... who knew Ryou could be such a posessive creature? *grins* I'm looking forward to the next chapter, whever you manage to get it out. ^___^
Ryou is soo naughty... but we like him that way. ^^ The bits with Bakura teasing/testing the other males was nice... but the reaction gotten from his then 'mystery' lover was even better... who knew Ryou could be such a posessive creature? *grins* I'm looking forward to the next chapter, whever you manage to get it out. ^___^
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August 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was *so* frickin' *hot*! Ryou being so... Damn, I need a cold shower or three.
Update soon, ne?
Update soon, ne?
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August 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hye peeps that was an ausome chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
keep up the good work!
Kura: goes to the kitchen to get "CREAMPUFFS"
me:"no kura-chan put thos creampuffs back"!!!!
Kura-chan:" NO THERE ALL MINE SO BACK OFF!!!
me:" backs off and runs away! '' (cries)?
Kura-chan:" THATS RIGHT RUN AWAY NEVER COME BACK!!!! AGAIN i WILL RULE THE WORLD WITH CREAMPUFFS!!! MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!!
me: 0.o "your crazy" keeps on runnin.
Kura-chan:(grabs the millenium rod):''I WILL SEND U ALL TO THE SHADOW REALM U HEAR THAT "SHADOW REALM".!!!!
Marik:"Hey that's my line give it back NOW!!!
kura-chan: No
Marik:yes
Kura-chan:no
Marik:yes
Kura-chan:no
Marik: yes
Kura-chan:no
yes
no
yes
no
yes
no
(starts a fight) The End
keep up the good work!
Kura: goes to the kitchen to get "CREAMPUFFS"
me:"no kura-chan put thos creampuffs back"!!!!
Kura-chan:" NO THERE ALL MINE SO BACK OFF!!!
me:" backs off and runs away! '' (cries)?
Kura-chan:" THATS RIGHT RUN AWAY NEVER COME BACK!!!! AGAIN i WILL RULE THE WORLD WITH CREAMPUFFS!!! MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!!
me: 0.o "your crazy" keeps on runnin.
Kura-chan:(grabs the millenium rod):''I WILL SEND U ALL TO THE SHADOW REALM U HEAR THAT "SHADOW REALM".!!!!
Marik:"Hey that's my line give it back NOW!!!
kura-chan: No
Marik:yes
Kura-chan:no
Marik:yes
Kura-chan:no
Marik: yes
Kura-chan:no
yes
no
yes
no
yes
no
(starts a fight) The End
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August 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Woohoo! I thought it was Ryou! *cheers* Go Ryou! He's such a naughty boy:P Great chapter:)
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August 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You were planning on finishing this, right? It isn't nice to leave in the middle of a hot and heavy lemon like that.
Um...one thing I've noticed, and I can't remember if I brought it up before... you're having trouble with attributing people's lines. The action or atribution (said, ect) should be on the same line as the dialogue, not the one before, or ia bia bit confusing.
Please don't take that as a flame, it's about the only thing I can find wrong - the rest is great, and I had to giggle at Yami Bakura running around town feeling up the guys! Yami and Ishtar must have been howling with laughter when he got to them. I know I was.
Anyway, until next chapter!
Um...one thing I've noticed, and I can't remember if I brought it up before... you're having trouble with attributing people's lines. The action or atribution (said, ect) should be on the same line as the dialogue, not the one before, or ia bia bit confusing.
Please don't take that as a flame, it's about the only thing I can find wrong - the rest is great, and I had to giggle at Yami Bakura running around town feeling up the guys! Yami and Ishtar must have been howling with laughter when he got to them. I know I was.
Anyway, until next chapter!