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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, you!...*places hands on hips*...Where are you with our update, hmmmm?!...>___<...
...This story is really good! Well-written and truly captivating!...Very dark, but I love it!...I love how thorough you were with Seto's POV!...I'm a bit confused, though...is everything after the first (or is it second?) chapter a flashback, the 'story' Seto is unfolding?...If so, it clears up some of the confusion...
...I like how you were able to pull off some humor in such a dark fic; the fact that Seto could snarl like that at Jou with blood pooling out of his head had me laughing my ass off!...I know, I am a sadist at heart....^_^''...and I like how Jou is represented as Seto's lifeline! Eloquently put! The way he can bring out ~any~ emotion out of the CEO is evidence enough that he can still be saved, that he still has a chance for companionship (at the very least)!
...Your portrayal of an anorexic/bulemic Seto is very believable...and though I don't know first-hand about this subject, I can tell how accurate your portrayal is! Great job and I hope you will get hit by the muse again and continue to write! Thank you for your time and thanks for sharing! If I don't make much sense, I apologize...insomnia does this to you! ^-^
...This story is really good! Well-written and truly captivating!...Very dark, but I love it!...I love how thorough you were with Seto's POV!...I'm a bit confused, though...is everything after the first (or is it second?) chapter a flashback, the 'story' Seto is unfolding?...If so, it clears up some of the confusion...
...I like how you were able to pull off some humor in such a dark fic; the fact that Seto could snarl like that at Jou with blood pooling out of his head had me laughing my ass off!...I know, I am a sadist at heart....^_^''...and I like how Jou is represented as Seto's lifeline! Eloquently put! The way he can bring out ~any~ emotion out of the CEO is evidence enough that he can still be saved, that he still has a chance for companionship (at the very least)!
...Your portrayal of an anorexic/bulemic Seto is very believable...and though I don't know first-hand about this subject, I can tell how accurate your portrayal is! Great job and I hope you will get hit by the muse again and continue to write! Thank you for your time and thanks for sharing! If I don't make much sense, I apologize...insomnia does this to you! ^-^
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!...me again...just wanted to also throw in that this story has such a great sense of direction that it shouldn't be wasting away in limbo! It has potential to be even more powerful than it already is!...but not to say that you should rush it, either!...just a note saying 'yay' or 'nay' on whether you will continue!...and also to let you know that either way, this fic has struck an emotional chord in my heart, so even if it's unfinished, this small glimpse moved me! Thank you and good luck! ^^'
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
...hmmmm...very first review got cut off...>,<...
...in short, I basically told you how awesome of a writer you were and that you should continue with this story!...I also commended you on pulling off humor within such a dark story, with an even darker subject...your portrayal of Seto was highly believable...all that stress and responsibility was bound to have pushed him off one of those cliffs he so dangled from!...really got a kick out of the scene in which Seto fell and not only picked himself up, but was able to pull off a snarl as blood was literally oozing from the wound on his head...that made me laugh my ass off!...I also like how you represented Jou as a kind of lifeline to Seto; his one hold on humanity besides Mokuba....so good luck and keep on writing!
...in short, I basically told you how awesome of a writer you were and that you should continue with this story!...I also commended you on pulling off humor within such a dark story, with an even darker subject...your portrayal of Seto was highly believable...all that stress and responsibility was bound to have pushed him off one of those cliffs he so dangled from!...really got a kick out of the scene in which Seto fell and not only picked himself up, but was able to pull off a snarl as blood was literally oozing from the wound on his head...that made me laugh my ass off!...I also like how you represented Jou as a kind of lifeline to Seto; his one hold on humanity besides Mokuba....so good luck and keep on writing!
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay...AFF officially hates me and reviews...
...loved your story and your writing style!....admired the way you could pull off humor within such a dark storyline!...laughed my ass off at Seto's display after falling off the stairs (how he could pull off a snarl while bleeding through a hole in his head)...Great job and good luck in hopes you continue with this fic! ^____^
...loved your story and your writing style!....admired the way you could pull off humor within such a dark storyline!...laughed my ass off at Seto's display after falling off the stairs (how he could pull off a snarl while bleeding through a hole in his head)...Great job and good luck in hopes you continue with this fic! ^____^
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July 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh goodness! Why would you stop?! This is suuuch a good story! You've captured the main character's thoughts very well (not to mention that they are pretty much the exact thoughts of an actual person with an ED), and your writing and eloquency are SUPERB. Way to go! Now, write me some more- and fast!
PS: Please :)
PS: Please :)
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May 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Uriel, Gabriel and Muggles huh? Something's just way off with this fic ya know? Did you actually write this cause I could have sworn I've read parts of this in other places. Either way, it needs fixed, or else it won't make any sense in this way. You were calling Mokuba Uriel and Jounouchi Gabriel... and I doubt Mokuba's a wizard, ne?
Chys
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May 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this, i dont think i can find the words really. Its beautifully painfull and brutally honest. It has the same seductive sway as what it describes and the same painful truth underlying it with feelings that i know all to well.
Truthfully i don't know whether to say thank you or damn you (nothing personal of course, its just my reaction to the content) you've actually managed to convey a part of the pain and hatred that underscores ED and depression and so many other things that our society doesn't want to acknowledge - yet everyone who recognises it falters in the face of. One thing i've found - people who know what its like seem to drown in the pain that is conveyed whereas those who don't - simply don't understand. Lucky them.
Thank you. Thank you for actually pulling the truth out of a subject that is much misconstrued.
sorry - tis one am and i'm angsty and fretting. But i just had to say something.
I'd really like to see more of how this story plays out. Your writing is beautiful.
thanks.
Truthfully i don't know whether to say thank you or damn you (nothing personal of course, its just my reaction to the content) you've actually managed to convey a part of the pain and hatred that underscores ED and depression and so many other things that our society doesn't want to acknowledge - yet everyone who recognises it falters in the face of. One thing i've found - people who know what its like seem to drown in the pain that is conveyed whereas those who don't - simply don't understand. Lucky them.
Thank you. Thank you for actually pulling the truth out of a subject that is much misconstrued.
sorry - tis one am and i'm angsty and fretting. But i just had to say something.
I'd really like to see more of how this story plays out. Your writing is beautiful.
thanks.