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November 24, 2018 at 12:00 AM
this is really a good story, will there be a sequel of sorts? I hope so?
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February 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
fantastic story
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July 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I don't remember ever flaming anyone before, and I don't intend on flaming you, but I always speak (or write in this case) my mind, so even though you won't probably even read this since this story is so old, I'll write it anyway, even if just to relief my own conscience.
Well, I was about to say that Joey isn't a defenseless little girl, and he would never let Duke manhandle him like that, but then I remembered an episode of Buffy where Spike does the same thing to her, so I guess it happens.
Also, not directed only to you, but almost every single fanfiction writer in the world, stop using the few random japanese words you know! It just looks stupid. Especially when you do it wrong.
The first sex scene... well by know someone have probably already told you that it doesn't work like that.
I know it's useless to say, I should say this in practically every fanfiction I read, but nobody calls him 'Jou'. Oh, and don't even get me started on the 'hikari' and 'yami' thing and how they don't call each other that and don't have separate bodies.
Just in case you do read this and feel the urge to tell me to go fuck myself, I did enjoy your story a lot, it was original, fairly well written and fun. And who knows, by now you probably don't even make these mistakes anymore, if you're still writing, that is.
Okay, you can tell me to go fuck myself now.
Well, I was about to say that Joey isn't a defenseless little girl, and he would never let Duke manhandle him like that, but then I remembered an episode of Buffy where Spike does the same thing to her, so I guess it happens.
Also, not directed only to you, but almost every single fanfiction writer in the world, stop using the few random japanese words you know! It just looks stupid. Especially when you do it wrong.
The first sex scene... well by know someone have probably already told you that it doesn't work like that.
I know it's useless to say, I should say this in practically every fanfiction I read, but nobody calls him 'Jou'. Oh, and don't even get me started on the 'hikari' and 'yami' thing and how they don't call each other that and don't have separate bodies.
Just in case you do read this and feel the urge to tell me to go fuck myself, I did enjoy your story a lot, it was original, fairly well written and fun. And who knows, by now you probably don't even make these mistakes anymore, if you're still writing, that is.
Okay, you can tell me to go fuck myself now.
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January 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh.. my.. God.. I.. How.. Wow... *silence*
[Yami Carro: Uhm sorry for my hikari.. What she means is that it's one hell of a great fan fic.]
Yeah.. exactly! That's exactly my point! I mean, I haven't read a SetoxJonouchi fic as great as this in a long time! It was really breathtaking at many times ^^ (Is that really correct English? =P) Anyway, I like that you've managed to keep them all in character, if you know what I mean =P Although, Jono maybe behaves a little to much like a girl sometimes.. But that's kinda great too.. Humm.. *thinking*
[YC: What she's trying to say is that she likes when Seto is the dominated one *rolls his eyes*]
*blushing* Hey too much information! What I'm really trying to say is that I looooove your story and I will definetly (correct spelling ne? =P) read your other stories ^^ Hope you'll do more SetoxJono fics! They are my favourite paring ^^
Oh and one question! Why do you use all the Japanese names but not Anzu's? It's not a big a deal, really *shruggs* I don't even like her that much =P but I was just wondering...
Also I want to apologise (how do you spell it??) for my English =P I'm from Sweden so I don't use English a lot.. Took me half a damned hour to wrote this =P
Anyway, great job! ^^ I love it [YC: Yeah yeah, you've said it already. I think we all got that by now..]
Take care!
[Yami Carro: Uhm sorry for my hikari.. What she means is that it's one hell of a great fan fic.]
Yeah.. exactly! That's exactly my point! I mean, I haven't read a SetoxJonouchi fic as great as this in a long time! It was really breathtaking at many times ^^ (Is that really correct English? =P) Anyway, I like that you've managed to keep them all in character, if you know what I mean =P Although, Jono maybe behaves a little to much like a girl sometimes.. But that's kinda great too.. Humm.. *thinking*
[YC: What she's trying to say is that she likes when Seto is the dominated one *rolls his eyes*]
*blushing* Hey too much information! What I'm really trying to say is that I looooove your story and I will definetly (correct spelling ne? =P) read your other stories ^^ Hope you'll do more SetoxJono fics! They are my favourite paring ^^
Oh and one question! Why do you use all the Japanese names but not Anzu's? It's not a big a deal, really *shruggs* I don't even like her that much =P but I was just wondering...
Also I want to apologise (how do you spell it??) for my English =P I'm from Sweden so I don't use English a lot.. Took me half a damned hour to wrote this =P
Anyway, great job! ^^ I love it [YC: Yeah yeah, you've said it already. I think we all got that by now..]
Take care!
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November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hot, hell hot, hella hot, hot hot hot Yay
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October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow
Really ! ! Wow ! !
That's really good
*Claps Hands*
Really ! ! Wow ! !
That's really good
*Claps Hands*
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September 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Onisan is incorrect, oni is ogre, oniisan is older brother.
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September 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
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September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Jounouchi, Katsuya
Kaiba, Seto
Like that.
Kaiba, Seto
Like that.
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July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Seto better not be fuckin' dead!!!! >< if he is i will hunt you down and kill you *cries* please dont kill hiiiiiiim D: