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for Arresting Development

by NeoLizard28

person Lord Agent D.
schedule May 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I found myself wishing that the story would move at a more rapid pace while I was reading this chapter, actually, though I understand the necessity of getting all the details concerning setting and,especially, atmosphere down before launching into the rest of the story. I also had a few questions; number one, what does Yugi mean by 'another stranger' who just wanted to dominate him? Number two, what happened to Yami, and why is there just a nameless darkness where he had been? Number three, and this is majorly nitpicky, I know, but he phe police officer is in fact Seto (and we have many reasons to believe he is) I would think that Yugi would connect the fact that Seto also happens to have such a piercing during the very last scene before swearing revenge... but again, that could just be me.

I do enjoy the story so far, though, and I am looking forward to the next chapter. By far, my favorite touch is the dialogue; more of these lemony fics are just description and grunting, as though the characters were animals. Keep up the good work, and I hope my questions aren't too horribly obvious and stupid. Until next time!
person yugismine
schedule May 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
o.O Well, ahem, I've definitely never read anything like... THIS before. IT's, uh, kinda scary.
Still, I wanna wha what happens! More soon? Please?
person yugismine
schedule May 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
o.O Well, ahem, I've definitely never read anything like... THIS before. It's, uh, kinda scary.
Still, I w see see what happens! More soon? Please?
person yugismine
schedule May 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
o.O Well, ahem, I've definitely never read anything like... THIS before. It's, uh, kinda scary.
Still, I wanna see what happens! More soon? Please?
person Shadow Sabre
schedule April 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
"Uno City." Heh.

This is well-written, but I don't really care for non-con stuff. If it goes much further along these lines, could you put a warning in the teaser line?
person Shakster
schedule April 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
So I stumbled on this story. OOOOOOOOH it's GREAT!!!!! Nothing like little Yugi in a compromising position. Oh I love it all ready... I especially love guys in cop uniforms... I think Yugi needs to be punished to the full extent of the law... Damn this was so hot so far... wooohooo... MORE ^_^