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after re-reading this short story and the authors note that followed, I felt you might need some encouragement. The characters were not that OOC,. In fact, Kaiba may have been a little harder with the Egyptian, or insist they go to his place, but I thing you are right in that this was more discreet for the CEO.

It's a great plot idea and the story was not badly written, though I love the idea that you might one day continue this pairing in a fuller story. thanks for putting it on paper <3

ITS TOO AWESOME; write more on them sometime. I still think you did well in capturing them both. You were not far off at all.

I liked it. There just aren't hardly any Kaiba x Malik fics out there.

I also thought you did just fine with the characters.

this was good. The pairing is becoming a fav of mine. It was a little slow on the uptake, but took off from there.

I can`t wait for the next thing that you write.

I'm glad you kept this up. It was a great story. Write more stuff! It's really good

well i liked it and well, there were several mistakes but i think sometimes when u upload fics it tends to screw the grammer and words up some. anyway if you want to rewrite go ahead but please continue? i kinda feel bad for malik and hey, sometimes it's cool to write someone OOC. makes it more original ya know? well i liked it all the same :)

aww well i think you did a good job. i really like this fic and I do hope you are planing on writing more.

Well, the erotica in iteslf was good. You're a bit right, tho, the characters WERE very OOC, except when Malik would talk back to Kaiba. Malik wouldn't let himself feel vulnerable--he likes power, and he never lets anyone conquer him. It's the same with Kaiba, and I doubt the two of them together would lead to either of them submissing. And also, Seto Kaiba doesn't look like the kind of guy to go around in public smooching other MEN that he's barely had contact with in the first place. It would ruin his reputation.

But besides the OOC, it was good sex. Maybe just with other characters hehe ^_^;;

actualy, i liked it a lot. it's tru the way u made them, kaiba 'specialy, isn' the best but as a ahole it works well :)

How can you not like it? I thought it was beautiful! Sure they seemed just a tab OOC but hey it's fiction, you're allowed to do that! I am gonna reccomend this to a friend of mine who loves Marik/Malik (I personally love Seto, Bakura/Ryou). Like said beautifully done! I hope you add more to this or more with this coupling. Aren't enought stories with these two as the main pairings.