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Yugi needs to be involved in your story a lot more. Like all books, any scenes of a book that can be removed and not be damaging or detrimental in anyway should be removed or reworked. I suggest you rework Yugi's involvement in yr fic. Yugi at this point is akin to yr completely irrelevant character you see once and never again. You know like that cashier or soldier coming in to report something. If you intended yugi to be such a character you have one hell of a way of showing that by making yami be the only other person going thro the yami virus. Yugi/Yami is clearly not one of these unimportant characters. Yami has to deal with this virus, and not only that, gave away tips to deal with arias shadow powers. And if yami is to change from his jackass attitude at all, yugi has to be there, and besides he's in the circle of ryous closest friends, that in it of itself should make him more involved. They are clearly important to yr plot but yet are treated as totally pointless characters. This needs alot of work.

*RRRRRRRRRRRRRIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIPPPPPPPPPPPPP* *smiles* Much better!!

Whhhooooo!! 2 for 1!! Poor Seto!! I feel so much for him! I am sooo glad that he has Joey to help him!! And Otogi!! Lord, I will never look at butter the same way again!!!


Cannot wait for updates. I really need 'em right now!! Family life is a bit hard right now
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Lady Elfskye

thanks . this was a real good chapter

Hey c quo quote you on that? It sounds weird but I collect quotes in a journal of mine. Tristen's "brother" (gags) and every closed minded ass can jsut--You know what? It's not worth it. Too early to get pissed. I'm glad Aten's doing okay (makes voodoo doll of Rhonda and grabs box of pins) and Robbie is alive and well, if scared. But, I thought the High Priest bought Aria when she was 13? Aye maybe I'm wrong. I love your story so much and I an on pins and needles for the next chapter.

God damn it! The world's full of homophobes! Did you know that Bush is making a law that bi and homosexual people can't adopt?

**Squeals** ANOTHER PLUSHIE!!!! *moves plusies into anatomically impossible positions**

What are we going to do about Rhonda? *starts to look for keys to cement mixer* I don't think she's too young for cement galoshes...what is she, a size 3 or 4?
I miss Aria...she would know exactly how to handle a meany like her. *wipes tear from eye* Auntie Xeno misses her chibi!!

Wow! Whatta chappie!! Poor guys! They really need out of there. My sis is a bit of a pain when it comes to that. She had a friend over tonight and that friend brought a friend who was a lesbian. She looked at me and told me this, and I swear, there was fear in her voice. I just looked at her and said, "uh, so?" She just shrugged and left. Poor Robbie! Aten is home now, though. Glad he's away from Rhonda, at least till he goes back to school. Man, that child, OHHH!! I just wanna smack her!! Aria, you'll be fine. Find Seth's tomb. Soon!!

Lady Elfskye

Yeah, a Tristan and Otogi lemon would be nice! Put it in!

Thank you for your sympathy. I just might take up your offer of emailing you but first i need time to grieve. Unfortunatly it will be at least another 2 weeks before i gett tit time. This past weekend I went to my Aunt Vickie's funeral, then this weekend we went camping (it was windy and i got sick) and then next weekend we are going out of town to my brother in laws graduation he's getting his masters. Plus i've got summer classes on top of that. But i'm not reviewing my life i'm reviewing your story. I really really want a otogi, Tristan lemon. I think it would be great. In fact i get jittery just thinking about it. The story is getting great. But with Aria in Egypt will she find the bones of Bakura and Seth. Plus isn't malik's sister in Egypt. Will she find her and bring her home. Oh you left off at such a terrible spot. I can't wait for the update. Thanks again for your sympathies.

*cheers wildly/happily* Oh Aria you are the greatest!! Man she most defiantely is the daughter of bakura and he did teach ehr well!! Ooh hey she may be a kid but those bastards had what the fuck was coming to them. Is she gonna keep the puppy? And the lemon, HELL YES!!! god I sound like such a hentai ^^ Yes yes but pelase no chibi squishing. Oh and Aten is jsut hte most adorable thing in teh world!! Otogi should drown that bitch out. In fact, why don't tehy drown ehr period? I don't blame the girl's father. About tiem she got a spanking like that. next tiem he should use a belt like my dad did. Anyway Aria is free and she is one child you sure as hell don't want as your enemy. I love your story so much!! *does happy dance*