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October 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
9.ch 8
So far this is a very entertaining fic. Thank yu so much for writing it, I am really enjoying it.
I wanted to point out something funny.
When we write in a hurry, (I know I do it) we tend to replace intended words spelled wrong with the WRONG substitutes.
This is from the chapter, I rolled* I though it might make you laugh as well.
""He gave him a genital hug, trying not to hurt his burns worse""
I think that was supposed to be gentle...ROFL.
But if anyones going to be giving him a genital hug, it should be Baku. LOLz..
So far this is a very entertaining fic. Thank yu so much for writing it, I am really enjoying it.
I wanted to point out something funny.
When we write in a hurry, (I know I do it) we tend to replace intended words spelled wrong with the WRONG substitutes.
This is from the chapter, I rolled* I though it might make you laugh as well.
""He gave him a genital hug, trying not to hurt his burns worse""
I think that was supposed to be gentle...ROFL.
But if anyones going to be giving him a genital hug, it should be Baku. LOLz..
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October 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
10 ch 9
""Over here Okasama.” He said waving her over, smiling she got up and walked over to where he was standing. He pointed out to the night sky where a new star shown brightly.
“That Okasama…it’s a new star that showed up last week.” He said, she followed his finger and found the star he was pointing to. “That is my present to you.” She knelt down next to Yugi and pulled him close to her tears falling down her face.
“Okasama I didn’t mean to make you cry…did I do something wrong?” He asked. She shook her head and whipped her tears away.""
That right there ^
priceless!! Spelling and grammar only go so far when you can't write. You at least have talent. Stop listening to the flamers.
this was an awesome chapter.
""Over here Okasama.” He said waving her over, smiling she got up and walked over to where he was standing. He pointed out to the night sky where a new star shown brightly.
“That Okasama…it’s a new star that showed up last week.” He said, she followed his finger and found the star he was pointing to. “That is my present to you.” She knelt down next to Yugi and pulled him close to her tears falling down her face.
“Okasama I didn’t mean to make you cry…did I do something wrong?” He asked. She shook her head and whipped her tears away.""
That right there ^
priceless!! Spelling and grammar only go so far when you can't write. You at least have talent. Stop listening to the flamers.
this was an awesome chapter.
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October 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yes, make a sequel and don't worry about the flamers. I have Rat poison. LOL
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
DIIIEEEE TRISTAN! DIIIEEEE! A horrible, long, slow, bloody, painful, pointy death ^^ And with the last chapter I read.....A _GENITAL_ HUG?! What the hell is a GENITAL hug?!?!
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AAAWWWWW!! Poor, poor Yugi! *huggles* It's okay.... *pats*
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January 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well i read the ending im glad you decided to do a sequal i just hope it wont talke long anyways like the ending it was sweet and ill try and look for the sequal when ever you have it done
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November 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I can't believe i never read your story until now, i love it its great please update i was a fool for not reading it sooner please acept my apology IM SOOOOOO SOORRYY!!!!!!!!!!!!! anyways please update soon. oh and it would be nice it you could be a little more specific on...oh i don't know lets say um...KAIBA & JOE well only if you want.PLEASE
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October 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE
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April 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
awww, this story is so sweet. I love it. Vampires are the coolest things i have ever seen in my life. Yup, that's right. I've seen vampires. Mwuah. Poor Yugi crying and poor Ryou getting burned and stupid pompous Tristan. Bah. Are you going to kill him? He looks like a bird.
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Anyways, continue please!
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Anyways, continue please!
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April 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
dam u honda!!! poor ryou, poor yugi...
write soon!!!
write soon!!!