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March 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Uh hm... the first chapter was written well, but what the hell happen to the second and third one? Your grammar and syntax went to SHIT.
I REALLY suggest you get your chapters’ beta before posting
I REALLY suggest you get your chapters’ beta before posting
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March 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ooo poor Seto. Sheesh, poor Joey. Ewwww, weird peeping tom!! *reads last part* Whoa... Joey caused the accident?! Oh man... I hope the next chapter comes soon! I'm gonna go nuts waiting!
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March 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Love it. I am really enjoying this stroy. Poor Jou in both worlds. I hope SEto comes back to the real soon. Too long in the coma could be a bad thing. Man hitting the car of the person you love that is rough. waiting for the next chapter.
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March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great story please update soon!
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March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Me: wow, Joey doing a lap dance (i think)
Yami: *sighs* want me to do one for u?
Me: *blushes* NO! NOT NOW ANYWAYZ....
yAMI: aw, but i think the author wants one too
Me: *glares at author* see what u've done now?
Yami: *laughs* its not the author's fault, its you
Me: Me?! How?
Yami: *snicker* wearing that sexy leather all over you and walking around....
Me: YAMI! I WANTED TO WEAR THIS!
Yami: *smirk* whatever....*leaves room*
Me: anywayz, continue 2 update and i can't wait 2 see what happens next!!! *runs after Yami*
Yami: *sighs* want me to do one for u?
Me: *blushes* NO! NOT NOW ANYWAYZ....
yAMI: aw, but i think the author wants one too
Me: *glares at author* see what u've done now?
Yami: *laughs* its not the author's fault, its you
Me: Me?! How?
Yami: *snicker* wearing that sexy leather all over you and walking around....
Me: YAMI! I WANTED TO WEAR THIS!
Yami: *smirk* whatever....*leaves room*
Me: anywayz, continue 2 update and i can't wait 2 see what happens next!!! *runs after Yami*
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March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm....a non-rich, non-executive Kaiba? This is going to be fun to read! I hope you update soon!
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March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. Poor Jou, ugly dirty old man after him. So when si Seto going to realize oth other life is or would be better had Jou in it. I mean he can go back when he wakes up can't he? This is one of those comadreams stories? Anyway good chapter. waiting for the next one.
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March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was definitely interesting!!! Please, continue soon!!! It's to great to wait!
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March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Woo-hoo! Super cute premise to stick 'em together nice and early on! Stripper Jou is always an entertaining idea. I like the way you write, it's not confusing at all and I'm eagerly looking forward to more. See ya!
~Ryanookami
(your school actually does that?? Eek. I wouldn't want half the people at my school to know weird stuff like that about me....Although, Yugioh's my fave cartoon(anime), I prefer vegetable ramen, and I'd never answer a drool question.)
~Ryanookami
(your school actually does that?? Eek. I wouldn't want half the people at my school to know weird stuff like that about me....Although, Yugioh's my fave cartoon(anime), I prefer vegetable ramen, and I'd never answer a drool question.)
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March 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I love this fic! The idea is sooo cute. Can't wait until the next part is updated.