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okay, for Yami and Yugi, have you read the story called The most dangerous game? This guy hunts people and kills them because he has lost intrest in all the other animals. Something about wanting a prey that can outsmart him.
Anyway, make Yami the hunter, and Yugi the huntee. But instead of Yami Killing Yugi, He shoots him with a tranquilizing dart. And when Yugi wakes up, He has a nice suprise... sounds fun huh?

BEST ENDING EVER !!!!!!

That was a cute fic!...Well, as cute as prison and psychotic syndicate leaders can be...^^''...I thought that overall, the story was good...I think if you revised this story and flesh out alot of the scenes, this would be an awesome fic!...Like, I'm interested that Ryou killed Yugi, but I still don't know what Yugi did to Ryou...and when you did those flashback scenes, it would have been even more poignant if you didn't just 'copy and paste' the flashback, but elaborate on different aspects of the flashback (i.e. give us more details on how Ryou killed Yugi)...your OC character, Lelio sounds like a really great villain; I think you could have made him a little more sinister, though...and he was a bit careless in opening the door when he had a willing Ryou in the tub (though you did redeem yourself with having Malik caught by the guards)...and Ryou was a bit ditzy at times, too, like when he openly confronted Lelio to the fact that he knew! He could have at least lured him into some kind of insecurity (i.e. flirted with him and then threaten him to let him go)...but I like how you gave Ryou such a hard-ass persona; he's scarier than Bakura! It ~is~ always the quiet ones! ^_^...and the Shakespeare scene was one of my faves; I could totally see Bakura doin' that (though a bit OOC, I'll bite just cuz it's so hot!)...To sum it up: really intricate plot; needs to be fleshed out a bit; humerous, despite slight angst and violence...Still, nicely written! Know that this is in no way a flame; I just think that a story with this much potential, it should be looked over again! Thanks for sharing and good luck with your other fics! ^-^

::: cheers in wild approval ::: WOOOO! the ending is the best !!! ::Anzu Glares murder at Les::
Les: ::smiles 'innocently'::
Anzu: ::turns he back::
Les: ::waving a flag, wispering joyfully:: Yahhooo....

This is f*cked up! You could definetely improve on the grammar and make the chapters and lemons longer and better, buts its quite good!

yea its me again, i just finished reading the WHOLE story! wow!!!! very nice^^ YAY DEATH TO ANZU!

O SHIT! AWESOME

HOLY SHIT!!!! HE SHOT YUGI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! EIGHT TIMES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!!! i love yugi, but u gotta admit, THATS DAMN FUNNY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Man I love this fic, also like that you added a GC song in your fic. Anywho, really do like it.

Hi Eris-chan!!!! Long time no hear, huh? Great story! ^_^ Very sexy! Well, I miss you a lot, and really want to talk to you! IM me sometime, okay? Oh, and I'll be sending you an email sometime soon, so look 4 it! Luv always,

Chel no baka