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for The Fruit of Temptation

by ShadowSpecter17

person Enock
schedule April 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
awwwww I want more T.T *pouts* Please write more, it just started to get very good. Please, please. Its a great story here.
person Star Dust Midnight
schedule March 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Bwaaaaa^^ Wow, so cool! But... when does Yuugi come in?
person KuroKuroNeko
schedule March 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wai! I love Yami and Seto friendship. I told everyone if they weren't rivals they would be friends. Oh yeah... YOU PROMISED US YAMI WOULD MEET YUGI! Waaaaah! You lied to me.::: sniffle:::
person naiprincerette
schedule March 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this is great i love it and i can't wait for next chapter when yugi shows up. You are such a talented writer, I love allllllll your stories (yes I have read them all) please continue, pleasssssssseeeeee.
person synchu
schedule February 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great fic i can't wait till the next one. hope it is great see ya
person shiny cry
schedule February 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
When are Yami and Yugi going to meet! Please continue!!!!!!!!!
Oh, I also love your story ^_^
person P1
schedule February 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please coue Iue I am loving this so far... little Yami/Setto en aen ai... and when do we get to the YamixYugi lemon? O.O *waits expectantly.*
person Red Dragon of Egypt
schedule February 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
RD:what u want me to review five more times to make you happy shadow sheesh your acting like Xpyne and not in a good way either your starting to become a review whore u know that not to insult you be mean to you or just plain not being nice but you r acting like how xpyne does when she asks for a reviews but your work so far is very u must keep this ficc up i want to see yami go head over heals in love with yugi
Yami:but im head over heals already
RD:O_O Y-yyyYAMI!!!!!!!!!!!! is that really you
Yami:who else would i be im the only person with tri-colored hair besides yugi with crimson eyes and a viscous temper when cross who is madly in love with his rescuer
RD:*glomps yami wraping her body around him in a snake like hug*YAMI nt bnt believe u decided to visit me this is soo great im your biggest fan uknow *looks at her enormous and long dragon form*literally to hehe so were is your wonderful rescuer cuz as much as i love u yami i love him the most
Yami:>___< back off hes mine but anyways hes over there watching that black reddish dragon torture anzu i was to until u said my name um
RD:oh sry the names Red Dragon of Egypt RD for short and thats my sister BRD short for Black Red Dragon shes kinda of like a yami to me for she's that much darker
Yami:and you
RD:hehe ust ust vicous like u in a way*sends a twister of flame at anzu and roasts her*see
Yami:hmm yes
Yugi(the most greatest duelist on earth and the cutest little angel in the universe):hey who just roasted anzu that was cool
RD:oh glad u like that was yurs truly chibi tenshi um can i call u that pls
Yugi:um well ok since u did do me a favor in making everyone who hurts me or yami pay herd you and that black red dragon over there have a fierce rep for this sort of thing
Yami: her name is Black Red Dragon who is Red Dragons sister how good are u by the way at what u do
RD:*looks at them with a smug smirk and an evil look in her eyes*care for atour
Y&YY:sure
RD:great *pulls a rope next to her and all the door containing totured ims ims open up and they come out and go down on their hands and knees not once looking up for fear of RDs wrath*as u can see im quite good at what i do my newest adition is and extreamly OOC joey
Yami:whats he in here for
RD: well in this one story your in a relationship with him and he isnt very nice to put it mildly
Yami:>__< E L A B O R A T E
RD:eheh well your *takes this huge breath then speaks* inthisabusiverelationshipwithjoeyandheisusingyourdisablilityasawaytogetlaidwhileheissecretlyseeingsetowhoissecretlyseeingryodosndosnttelljoeyjustlikehedosnttellyoubouthisaffairwithseto*huffs for being so out of breath*
Yami:um repeat that pls and more slowly this time
RD:*gulps*he basically uses yor sor sex and what not due to you having a abandonment disablity or something like that basicall yur afraid he will leave you and he uses that against you
Yami:WHAT WHY THAT DIRTY WROTTEN BASTARD ILL KILL HIM*stretches out his hand and obliterates joey who just comes back but is in absolute pain*huh what happened he should be destroyed *looks at RD*what happened
Yugi:yeah why didnt he disapear like panik did when yami did that
RD:hehe a little something i whiped up its called a revival crystal which basically revives my victims everytime i do something to him/her or someone else does and basically they alive just in absolute pain depending on the intensity of said pain
Y&YY:cool thats a great idea
RD:glad you like hehe i always come up with stuff like that now shadow dear pls update if not for me for them*points to yami and yugi*you know how much they love each other they MUST get together now boy care fome fme fun with anzu
Y&YY:sure but how
RD:glad you asked here yami you take this*hands him a staff made of gold with a ruby on the top with a claw holding it
Yami:whats this for and what does it do
RD:first its for torturing any whom i see fit second it sends out waves of fire how instense you want it depends on the fire you summon
Yami:fire i summon
RD:yes here let me show u *pulls out a staff like yami and aims it at Anzu*FOREST FIRE*a fire known for breaking lose in drouts in woods and for foresty areas apears and burns anzus arms and legs*see
Yami:oh i see so u just shout out what fire you want and this staff sends it to your victim
RD:yup now yug its your turn so do u want fire to or plants or water or what element
Yugi:hmm is there one for animal shapeshifting
RD:oh u mean to allow u to become any an u w u wish*yugi nods*yes we do have such a one here*hands yugi a staff just like yamis except its dark rasberry red mixed with dark brown and theres a amper in cla claw this time*there u go a staff that will let u become any animal you think of litterally
Yugi:what do u mean
RD:well if u say think of an eagle or a tiger persay then u become that animal watch *pulls out a staff like yugi's and thinks of a griffon and becomes one*see easy and i shuld tell u theres no limits as u can see im a dragon yet i can becom a griffon and yes dragons are to availabl to you yugi but doubtless given who you are in personality you will doubtless be whin ain all your transormations
Yugi:u mean if i becom a tiger ill become a whit one
RD:yes for you become the color that best suits you ok now boys have fun
Y&YY:we will*run off to torture anzu and soon you hear sms oms of pain and fear while yami laughs evilly while yugi lets out laughs like a wolf/what ever animal he chose*well looks like their having fun well anyways shadow keep up the great work TTFN TA TA FOR NOW hey guys save some for me*goes over to the boys and starts using whips of different elements and shares with the boys who find them interesting and fun to use yugi even tries his luck with my DE DDs and Dots*hehe i just love watching my uh oh um i mean*shrinks in fear at the glare yami gives her*i mean Yami's yugi have fun*yami goes back to having a smirk/smile on his face*whew geez that was close um BRD HIDE ME*runs behind her sister*BRD:dont worry he wont hurt u sis*she wraps hersefl around her sister protecting her from all harm while helping her with torturing anzu*RD:whew well cya shadow and remember ALL:UPDATE PLS ^____^
person Arainaina
schedule February 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon this was very good i reall like it
person ACIDFLOWER
schedule February 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
KICK ASS HON! YOU ROCK! keep up the cute bunnies LOL