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January 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
very interestng chapter
i liked when they were up in seto's room
please update soon!!!!
i liked when they were up in seto's room
please update soon!!!!
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January 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Excuse me for being so blunt, but... You're a college student and you do kno know that (in dialogue) all punctuation goes *inside* the quotation marks? You've consistently placed commas *outside* the quotation marks in all your dialogue. I respectfully suggest finding yourself a good beta reader to help you with your punctuation. Otherwise, you've got a pretty good story here. The scene where Yami was teasing Yugi about being "naughty" with Ryou was cute and funny, and I like the way you write Mokuba.
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January 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
sniff WOW sniff
sniff THAT sniff
sniff WAS sniff
sniff HOT sniff
sniff AND sniff
sniff SAD sniff
keep up the great work
HUGS sorut Iut I am sad and sick today
please sniff forgive me
UPDATE soon sniff awwwwwwwwwwww
KICK ASS STORY I SO LOVE IT
Keep it up ^__^
yes I am feel better now
sniff THAT sniff
sniff WAS sniff
sniff HOT sniff
sniff AND sniff
sniff SAD sniff
keep up the great work
HUGS sorut Iut I am sad and sick today
please sniff forgive me
UPDATE soon sniff awwwwwwwwwwww
KICK ASS STORY I SO LOVE IT
Keep it up ^__^
yes I am feel better now
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January 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*tackles Shakster* PLEASE KEEP WRITTING. I'm fucking addicted...I'm practically asleep but I had to read it to the end! You can't leave us devoted fans hanging! Please update soon!! I am really impressed with your proper grammar and spelling, some of the stories here are less than rablrable and I usually lose interest because of the poor english, but I was hooked to yours because of the amazing plot and the fact that I could ACTUALLY read what was written, instead of having to reword sentances in my head so it would make sence! Keep it up!!
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January 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
trippin!! Tristan's such an ass in this fic.. at some points.. Gods, I cant wait until Joey goes to Seto.. Set's SO much better for him.. as for Yugi and Yami, well.. That was bloody awesome!! ^___^ Yugi makin moves on Yami.. yup, I wrote a lemon like that once, for my friend's fic.. that was awesome.. though that dream yami/yugi/Black Magician, that gave baaad mental images.. o_O;; which was probably the whole point.. anyway, I hope you update again really soon!! ^_____^
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January 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*reads last sentence to preview* OH YEAH!?!?!? WELL THAT'S WHAT YOU DESERVE SLUTTY BITCH!!! BWAHAHAHAHHAAAAA!!! (Seriously, Tristan is the slut, not Joey.) WAHHHH!!! SETO IS SO SWEET!!! FORGET TRISTAN JOEY!!! Besides, I thinkstanstan needs to fix himself before going in a relationship again.
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January 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OH MAN! SO, JOEY AND TRISTAN HAS A FIGHT IN THE NEXT CHAPPIE?! I JUST GOT TO SEE THAT! PLUS, WHAT'S WITH YAMI AND THIS MARIK CRAP THING? THEY SHOULDN'T BE TOGETHER! YAMI LOVES YUGI VERY MUCH!!! OH, SOME JOEY AND KAIBA LEMONY GOODNESS!!! I HATE JOEY BEING UPSET AND CONFUSED OF HIS TWO LOVERS!!! WELL, CONTINUE 2 UPDATE AND HURRY UP WITH JOEY'S PROBLEMS AND YAMI BEING WITH A MARIK THING RUMOR!!! CONTINUE 2 UPDATE AND DON'T WAIT 2 LONG 2 UPDATE!!! HURRY UP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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January 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter. Good for Yugi and Yami, they finnaly took that step. Yugi, Yami, and the DM? that might be a good pwp one shot. Seto said some harsh things but Joey needed to hear them. Tristian is...well I said it last review. Any way waiting for the next chapter.
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January 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
DD: Ok, one question...why is Tris turning out to be the bad guy here?
YD: Yeah, I mean, he's hurting. And he really does love Joey.
DD: Gods, I'm snfused!!ed!!
YD: Me too. Can't wait for Monday. Maybe that'll help.
DD: I have to wonder tho...all that shit Seto said about Tris...how much of that was jealousy?
YD: Most of it could be chalked up to that.
DD: And it sounds to me like Ryou has feelings for Tris.
YD: I'd just hate to see him and Joey lose everything they've ever had over this.
DD: Great story!!
YD: We're loving it.
YD: Yeah, I mean, he's hurting. And he really does love Joey.
DD: Gods, I'm snfused!!ed!!
YD: Me too. Can't wait for Monday. Maybe that'll help.
DD: I have to wonder tho...all that shit Seto said about Tris...how much of that was jealousy?
YD: Most of it could be chalked up to that.
DD: And it sounds to me like Ryou has feelings for Tris.
YD: I'd just hate to see him and Joey lose everything they've ever had over this.
DD: Great story!!
YD: We're loving it.
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January 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH SO GOOD KEEP GOIN' HURRY AND GET THE NEXT CHAPTER UP SOON KAY