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May 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eww that was the most gruseome story ever it was worser than the one in witch Will and Phobos who ever you are gross?
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August 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I love the storyline and everything, but the actual story is bloody annoying and *repetetive*!
And could you stop with the "I am blah-blah-blah-blah and in the name of blah-blah-blah-blah I will blah-blah-blah-blah. We don't care. And would you *stop* with the descriptions! Who cares what colours their stupid outfits are, or what their stupid attacks are!? Yanno, the story is seriously turning out rubbish because the only thing in the story is constant repetition of what they wear, what they say before they attack and what their attacks are called. Unless they have new attacks or new outfits, stop telling us about them!!!!! Get on with the damn story and stop wasting time and space on their stupid pathetic speeches and their stupid outfits and their stupid attacks. Just write "the senshi shouted the names of their various attacks" or something.
And, I know SM is a cartoon, but the someday the monsters aren't just gonna sit back and let them spout off for 20-odd minutes on how they're *this* scout from *that* planet and they're gonna do *this* in the name of *t. An. And you don't need a damned youma attack every 5 minutes of every bloody chapter! Slow down, write about them when they're *not* fighting Imation's thugs. I dunno, have Yami take Yugi on a date to see Van Helsing at the cinema, or have them all go for a relaxing day at the beach or something. Throw in a scene of Yugi eating an icelolly and not knowing how erotic it looks from Yami and co's points of view.
People won't hate you for giving the characters a chance to breathe and have some fun before the next youma attacks them all. Slow down and give people - the characters and the readers - a chance to calm down before being thrown into another life-threatening situation.
And could you stop with the "I am blah-blah-blah-blah and in the name of blah-blah-blah-blah I will blah-blah-blah-blah. We don't care. And would you *stop* with the descriptions! Who cares what colours their stupid outfits are, or what their stupid attacks are!? Yanno, the story is seriously turning out rubbish because the only thing in the story is constant repetition of what they wear, what they say before they attack and what their attacks are called. Unless they have new attacks or new outfits, stop telling us about them!!!!! Get on with the damn story and stop wasting time and space on their stupid pathetic speeches and their stupid outfits and their stupid attacks. Just write "the senshi shouted the names of their various attacks" or something.
And, I know SM is a cartoon, but the someday the monsters aren't just gonna sit back and let them spout off for 20-odd minutes on how they're *this* scout from *that* planet and they're gonna do *this* in the name of *t. An. And you don't need a damned youma attack every 5 minutes of every bloody chapter! Slow down, write about them when they're *not* fighting Imation's thugs. I dunno, have Yami take Yugi on a date to see Van Helsing at the cinema, or have them all go for a relaxing day at the beach or something. Throw in a scene of Yugi eating an icelolly and not knowing how erotic it looks from Yami and co's points of view.
People won't hate you for giving the characters a chance to breathe and have some fun before the next youma attacks them all. Slow down and give people - the characters and the readers - a chance to calm down before being thrown into another life-threatening situation.
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September 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
OMG OMG!!! What a perfect Combo!!! I love both SM and Yugi!!! GO U!!!
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March 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
PLEASE UPD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THE FIC IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YAY YAMI-CHAN!!!!!!!!! *thinks* yami is the brother of usagi. that explains alot. i mean, it explains where her intelegence went. he got the better half of the genes. he!!!!!!!!!
-Hine no Chikyuu
-Hine no Chikyuu
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March 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Loved it! Eveoughough I'm not a big Sailor moon fan... (grumbles) I only liked the outer senshi everyone else die! (pulls out her guns and shoots them) I would love to know when the next chapter is up! Thanks!
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February 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I absolutly can not wait for more! I LOVE it! ^_^
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February 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
this story is coming along good and i can't wait for some action!!!...i'm so hentai....oh well!
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February 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
i love this story
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January 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Cool fic. Write more. Read some of it on ff.net. Hope you write some sex scenes tween Yami and Yugi. Lots good. Write more soon. Geddess bless you, and wind to thy wings!
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January 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hey, great story.. but before I go on, I needed to point out a few things..
Um.. It's Mokuba Kaiba and Seto Kaiba.. they just call Seto by his last name.
Teacher in Japanese, is Sensei, not Sensai.. and you were right about the whole 'aibou' thing, it does mean partner.
Lastly, the attachment '-chan' is usually only used for young girls (think little kids/toddlers/babies), younger family members (like a grandaughter or possibly a grandson), or for a childhood friend (I mean someone you know REALLY well, or since you were children), it's a sign of affection basically.
'-san' is used in formal as well as informal situations. You were correct when you said you attached '-san' to people you have just met. '-san' is also used for people of the same, or near same status as you (like when talking to a fellow student, or maybe a TA). '-san' is also used for girls (or boys who want to appear more mature) around the preteen and teenage ages.
The third attachment is '-kun' which is used for guys about teen or preteen ages. It's also used among close male friends (so basically, Yugi would say Jounouchi-kun or Honda-kun).
And then their's '-sama' which I'm not going to bother getting into...
Gah, but enough babbling, excellent story! I've never read a Yugioh/Sailormoon crossover.. You've convinced me to do it more often!!
Um.. It's Mokuba Kaiba and Seto Kaiba.. they just call Seto by his last name.
Teacher in Japanese, is Sensei, not Sensai.. and you were right about the whole 'aibou' thing, it does mean partner.
Lastly, the attachment '-chan' is usually only used for young girls (think little kids/toddlers/babies), younger family members (like a grandaughter or possibly a grandson), or for a childhood friend (I mean someone you know REALLY well, or since you were children), it's a sign of affection basically.
'-san' is used in formal as well as informal situations. You were correct when you said you attached '-san' to people you have just met. '-san' is also used for people of the same, or near same status as you (like when talking to a fellow student, or maybe a TA). '-san' is also used for girls (or boys who want to appear more mature) around the preteen and teenage ages.
The third attachment is '-kun' which is used for guys about teen or preteen ages. It's also used among close male friends (so basically, Yugi would say Jounouchi-kun or Honda-kun).
And then their's '-sama' which I'm not going to bother getting into...
Gah, but enough babbling, excellent story! I've never read a Yugioh/Sailormoon crossover.. You've convinced me to do it more often!!