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It's sad to see this story discontinued. I love it loads and would utterly love to read more

Aww, you haven't updated. I'm so disappointed. But then again you DO have a life. But I wish you update. Plz

SQUEE! THE CUTENESS! *hugs yami*

MORE PLEASE!

Kuro

First off, I'll start by saying I do love this story. That's why I've read this far, and that's why I intend to read the rest. On that note, I do have some comments that will hopefull help improve your future writing. You have a great plot going on, with a good grasp of your main characters, but I've been finding that sometimes you're cutting corners on details. Some important, others not so much. The thing that confused me the most was why the secretary(? I can't remember what word you used for her) at the complex went from being so cooperative for fear of losing her job, to so defiant of what Yugi was asking. There was really nothing I could see that prompted that change. Then there's other things, like why, if Yami was dropped on this places doorstep at two, why wasn't he just sent to an orphanage? Two year olds are supposed to be trouble. And what is it about Yugi that he trusts so instantly. Yeah, he protected him the day before, but ultimately even Yugi ended up sending him back to the complex. That's kind of an act of betrayal if he doesn't understand what's going on. You're really talented, so I wouldn't bother saying any of this if I didn't think it would change a thing, but I honestly think once you start asking yourself why everything in your story is happening, and give it a reason, you'll have the talent to write incredible, completely unforgettable things! Alright, I'm going to go finish the story now!

Oh my goodness, I don't blame Seto at all. Maybe the kicking thing was going a bit too far, but I'd have hit someone I loved too if they were going to give up their dreams, and their future for a friggen day at the water park! I mean, REALLY!!! But yeah, the candy necklace scene was beyond cute...

Cute. I like the subplot with Mai. A little random, but it works. I have to admit, I'd really like to know what exactly Yami 'has' too. It seems to have capped his ability to learn, but he learned English (evidentally) really quickly. It's interesting. Sorry :) Psych major, and trying to think of such a condition would truly exist. Though I still think Yugi's being dumb by not being at that school interview!!

Why aren't you writing new chapters ;( i love this story pls add new chapies soon plsss ^^

I love this story,what hapens next,pls continue âðèòèíã PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEE ^^^^^^^^^^^^

WOW!!! Yami is soooo CUTE!!! ^_^ Please please please write another chappie soon!!

Kilala:*hyper as she can be* AHHHHHHHH!!!!!ISSODARNADORABLE!CUTE!!....KAIWAIIIIIIII!!!!!!!!!MAKEMORECHAPIEPLZ!!!
Kulula:=^>_>^= Please excuse my Yami.You see she is in love Yami and when she acts this cute!she gets hyper //Brain:Even though she is always hyper for a Yami//
Kilala:PLZWRITEMORECHAPYFORMEHNTHEOTHERPPLIDON'TKNOWPLZWRITEMOREORIWILLGOINSANE.
Kulala:*above a whisper*You are alrwady insane.
Kilala:*her cat-like ears twitch* IHEARDTHATUDAMNBRAT!!!ANYWAYILOVEURSTORYWRITEMORENKEEPUPTHEGOODWORKORNOTIWILLSENDUTOTHESHADOWREALM!!!!
Kulala:Kilala stop threatening the author.
Kilala:*pout*Party pooper!